absolutely beautiful and the word repetition was Great;]

That's awesome. It's got a lot of emotion and power. You have a similar writing style to my own.

Hearts for you, babe.

so sweet...

I think you captured both characters very well indeed, and rather than being a bad thing, the word repetition worked to your advantage. It creates a very fitting mood and tone to the fic, and that just makes it better. I really like all of the little scenes you had in this...they were all such a good little window into their life together, and made you really feel their pain at parting.

Great job!

I think you've captured the pain of a romantic mortal-immortal relationship better than the LOTR films did. The sentence repetition isn't to overused, I thought, but remains actually a very powerful device.
I like Legolas's reversal of the scenario-that he was the one to die, not Gimli.
I can't quite figure out why, if the idea of these two characters sleeping together is so funny in my mind, this fanfic is so emotionally touching.

That makes me really sad...::dies:: NO! WHY DID HE DIE!? I have a pic that reminds me exactly of this story...O-o'

That was really amazing, i'm almost speachless...

It sounded very poetic. very well done^^

(p.s. i'm one of the gaian judges *wink*)

it's a good story but the circumstances are completely non canon and i'm not referring to the slash. gimli goes with legolas across the sea after aragorn dies. he says he wants to see lady galadriel again. and apparently the valar made an exception for gimli to go.

I thought you wrote a pretty good story. You had a good command of the pacing and remained consistent in your characterization. You didn't say too much but gave the reader enough detail to paint a believable emotional landscape. I thought you gave a good effort in portraying those powerful, mature emotions and their complex nature. Its not easy, most people would avoid it all together, but you pulled it off well.

Your repetition of the line, 'Gimli, do you remember?' is actually very powerful in that the reader has a true sense of Legolas' grief in just those simple words. It gives your story a lyrical effect. Good job!

I think your writing shows a lot of promise and I wish you the best of luck. I do agree with your other reviewer in that you should give your story a higher rating, just as a precaution. Not everyone is as open about SLASH stories as others. Good work, Penguin-chan!

Alma's Muse

Quite good, actually. Keep it up.

Very well executed. I believe you have potential for writing this type of work in the future. I thought it had the right amount of angst, romance, and satirical humor all rolled into one. It was very well done.

L.M.

P.S. Bump up the rating as it is slash. Just that one suggestion.