Oh my...very moving. I love your thoughts and vision about those scenes. You made it so much more painful, yet at the same time grateful. Those scenes seem so much more epic now. And I'm glad you saw Illyria's words as truth, even though Joss made it clear that Fred no longer exists. I have to believe they found each other. If I don't, it makes it to hard. Anyway, wonderful work. Definitely one of my favorites.

this was wonderful
it made me want to cry
it was so good
i loved it.
you are a great writer
keep up the good work!

Well, since you just loved to critize me on my fic, I figured I'd return the favor.

First off, I have seen Angel. Every episode. Don't try to act like an ** and try to claim something you know nothing about.

Second, I wouldn't expect you to like the story anyway. You are a C/A shipper, and C/A shippers generally don't like the coupling of Buffy/Angel, and that is pretty apparent in the way you've presented yourself.

This is an Alternate Universe fic, and so the characters and their characteristics tend to differ than from the actual world.

Personally, I'm not fond of the fic either. I wrote it when I was much younger, and I just can't delete it off my computer.

Flames like the one you gave me just make me laugh harder and aspire to be a better writer.

Now onto your fic and why I am critizing it.

Do you know what an actual sentence is? You generally don't start any sentence with the termonology "And" or "But" or any of those kinds of words for that matter. There are some rare cases, but after looking over your fic I can tell this is not one of them. Your sentences appear choppy, and tend to run on.

Please do try to separate your dialogue paragraphs from your descriptive paragraphs. You don't put the two together.

It makes for a really annoying fic and people would consider it to be amateurish, no matter how well written it may be.

Also, put a comma at the end of your quotations, if you're going to continue them on with another set of quotations in the same sentence.

I'm not trying to be rude here, nor is this a retaliation flame. I'm just trying to be honest and help you out.

You can curse me, call me a horrible person; honestly, I don't care. I'm just giving my advice and I suggest you find a beta.

I'm a total Fresley shipper and I also love the song you used, Spirit: Stallion of the Cimarron is one of my favorite movies.

This is quite good. I'm a total Fresley shipper, so this really made my day! Good job!

That was very well done!