Aw that was so sweet nice job.

Lovely. Very consise but sweet and...nice. That's lame but it was very well written. Very poignant, I think is the right word.
There did seem to be some typos, mostly with commas though I'm not sure.
The lyrics really fit well with the story,too.
Of course I wrote some poems about the same subject (roughly) as well but I doubt I exhibit them since this story is so much better. ^_^