Your stories are great, but you need read over them once more. There are way too many grammatical errors...

"...scratching at the soul beneath his claws"

...Soul? I highly doubt you could scratch the SOUL beneath Palab's (I believe) claws, let alone under anyone's feet.


“One problem at a time, Kelly, our new friends just landed in the hanger.”

Hangar, hangar, not hanger. Although your story is well developed and all that, plenty of other stories with less developed plot lines have far superior "grammer" (Intentional misspelling) to yours. Perhaps edit a bit more and reupload, all your choice. YOu need to use the proper words in the PROPER CONTEXT.

is species 001 the brutes? this is the third time im reading thru this and i finally remembered to ask you. i find it funny that it would be the brutes. ehehe

and i thought the 1st book was tha best.i was wrong.this 1s better!im actually enjoying ur writing more than the books!ur characters are amazing lifelike, and u describe battles very well.the story isnt cheesy either, which is a huge plus after some of the stories here.gr8!

Hello soulguard, I know this review is extremely late in coming, as you're on the sequel and all, but I do have some nitpicks.

While your story is pretty good and the characters are interesting, I find your lack of research on military ranks extremely frustrating. While I know the US marines use a strange and archaic form of ranking, some ranks are generally standard through armies. My main issue is this: "The air was thick with tension as Rose nervously dressed into her uniform. She was immediately enlisted into the marine core as a WARRANT OFFICER."

Now, while I'm sure she has degrees is various fields and that said degrees often get one a commission in the armed forces, one does NOT become a Warrant officer with no prior training. In the commonwealth armies, well in this case Canada at least, the ranks go as follows: Private, Corporal, Master Corporal, Sergeant, Warrant Officer, Master Warrant Officer, and Chief Warrant Officer. There is no reason at all I can think of for a civilian being given one of the highest ranks an enlisted man can achieve. There is no excuse for this.

Another smaller issue is that you have Lieutenant Raynard being demoted to Sergeant. Now, I do get the situation he's in and all, but a commissioned officer simply does not get busted down to an enlisted rank. The duties and training of a senior NCO like a Sergeant are much different than that of an officer. Officers make plans and give orders, NCOs (Sergeant and up) actually get them done and are the ones who really keep an army running.

I'm sorry if I came across as a tad harsh, but a lack of research in a military fanfic just really grates on me. But I have enjoyed your story and, if you do make your re-edits of this and the grunt story, perhaps you can show proper ranks? Good work otherwise.

Like your other stories, impressive! Wish I had your way with words!

very good =)

I hate ending like that...should have my a chapter before that where it actually told the battle,but none the less it was an amazing story..

Masterchief456 Out.

NO! Come on how could you end it there. when the next story coming out. I NEED to know

I just love it so far it's awesome. one thing are the mirraford an actual group in the Elites because i've read about them in another story aswell

Yeah, I've finally gotten around to reading this. You're very good at describing tactical situations and you write good battle scenes. Keep it up.

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ok, good **, a few typos and spelling errors, but nothin to hold against you, i'd like to see where this is going. btw, book one was much better

Exceptional. thats all i have to say, i like the long books

Nice! I finished reading it, and I think it's awesome. Can't wait for the final book.

Awesome. Lots of grammar mistakes, but other than that it was cool. You seem to write 'now' instead of know, though.