Really sad, depressingly possible, with just a little hope at the end.

You certainly hit all the hallmarks of a bad boyfriend on that guy Kaoru's wasting her time on. It's a wonder ANYONE would stay with a man like that, but we know there are a lot of women who do and you paint a very convincing background for why Kaoru would stick with 'the boyfriend'. With how often her trainer calls her 'Kaoru' it's kind of surprising that she doesn't call him Kenshin. I certainly got a kick out of the name of the gym. You really ache for Kaoru and I adore Kenshin. It would have been nice to have Kaoru reach an epiphany before the end of the fic, although it's still good. I kinda like the angst/humor, all the stories I've run into in that category have been enjoyable.

Great one-shot! Poor Kaoru!

I really enjoyed reading this. This is probably the fifth or sixth time I've read it, and I still enjoy it. You should write a sequel to it; maybe the story from Kenshin's perspective or what happens when Kaoru finally leaves "the boyfriend."

well written, very good. i love haikus too..._

beutifully written. absolutely loved it. thanks for writing such ana aspiring one shot.]

Omg I love it O There should be a sequel XD

Ari chan

This is my favortie story of all time. Your ending leaves people hanging in hopes that the handsome trainer goes off with Kaoru. I liked how you use of 'names' in the story. One can easily miss her name in the beginning, kinda like a Jane Doe. You don't even know what Kenshin's name is or who the boyfriend is.

This story is different from all the others that I have read. In most of the stories Kenshin and Kaoru are together at the end of the story. While I was reading this I was thinking that you should write another chapter but now I think its perfect the way it is. Awesome oneshot! I hope to see another XD

That was cute. I think you should write a sequel to this where Kaoru dumps THE BOYFRIEND flat adn runs away with a certain cute red head _

She had an epiphany at the end xD I love the way that's written, it's quite a different style to most things I've read in it's detachedness, but it drew me in because of the perfect way it fit the character :D

This was a good idea, but I really can't see Kaoru being so weak. If she dislikes her boyfriend, why not leave him? Or, at the very least, yell at him? I dunno. But I like the thought of the Hiten Gym. It's too bad you didn't show us Hiko at all, though. I would've liked to see Kenshin get yelled at by him and then have to explain the situation to Kaoru.

Keep writing!

This little tidbit was really awesome... really wish you'd think about continuing it though, it has a wonderful flare and promising of being an awesome story... it would be spiffeh. Please keep up the fantastic work -Krystal-

Iie, I thought this was great I would love a continuation!

As for punctuation, I like and because I have no idea what they're for, so I like using them in weird ways :3

that was a very interesting one shot...but i liked it...it was good. _ you're very talented

It's good, I think, that you wrote something like this. There's too much happening too fast in a lot of the time, and life does happen fast, but sometimes it's slow.