I like it. A little awkward at times, and a couple of spelling errors, but it's still really good- the first original KH fic I've seen for a while. keep it up!

very interesting story so far. =3 I look forward to this read.

woot you put it up! ^o^

*places hand on katana* now work on the other stories as well as this one and i'll be happy

You have to continue this story! It's wonderful how you make the impotant parts count so well, while other people do the exact opposite, making small events seem better than the big ones. I also like the idea of Verdal. Continue this story please please please please please please please please please!