It would be cooler if Angemon were the one who became Piemon's slave XD just my opinion, anyway, good story :D

That was so sad. I'm glad that they all got back safely.

awesome ending

Poor Takeru. Hope you update more soon.

I don't think you got the whole e-mail.
thats really good! i really liked that story!I
-hope

thats really good! i really liked that story!I -hope

This story was very well written, but I guess that's to be expected since you said you were a teacher. I look forward to reading some of your other stuff.

Oh my poor T.k! Wonderful story and a fairly nice ending **is glad no one died**. Nice dark what if fics. Awesome job!

Eraya _

The story was excellent. I think the rating should be NC-17 though. I ususally dont like what if scenarios, but i liked this one.

wow, I loved it. just like I love all of your other digital takari fairy tales. you seem to know exactly what you are doing and i'll chalk that up to the fact you're studing it. please keep writting, the public needs more fics like these. anywayz, lates *smiles*...

mandy_

Man, this was creepy. Makes my skin crawl and sends shivers up and down my spine. This definately lives up to its R rating. Very disturbing. I hope that's what you were aiming for, Time Lady, 'cause it definately did it's job. First time I've seen a AU for this plot. The ending seems a little rushed, though...but good plot. Characterization was dead on, right on the dot - TK _WOULD_ go to any lengths to save Hikari and his friends, that's normal. The emotions were portrayed VERY well, heck, right now I want to give Piedmon the beating of his life and rip him apart with my own hands that *&@@#!$#$$%*$&%$%#@%#%@$!%%##$! HolyAngemon let him off too easy; he did him a favour by just dumping him into his Heaven's Gate/Gate of Destiny, he should've chopped him up into the individual bytes of data that composed him and THEN dump those data pieces into his portal. I feel SO sorry for Takeru, and the only REAL mistake I found in the whole thing is that you forgot the 'D' in Piedmon. This was freaky, disturbing, but so VERY good. My favourite part was when Angemon and Takeru reunited, oh man that was SO sweet! Awesome job Time Lady! ;)

::smiles:: Wow, this is the first Alternate Reality fic for this plot line I've read, but it was a very good portail of what would have probably happened in this case. Short, but sweet. Another good fic, Time Lady, good luck writing more! _V

i supose it was cool... god umm fic

Impressive...it very nearly made me cry. I like your style of writing, but you might want to try being a bit more descriptive. Other than that, I really don't have too much advice to give- plotwise, you write perfectly.

Wow. That was disturbing. But really, really good. You do a good job of being descriptive while keeping at R rating content. I like this a lot, and now I'm going to go read the second part.