D was OOC, incredibly OOC, but you did captured Leon in the right way.

I loved this. I had the same thought when I read that scene - that that's what Leon asked D. And isn't it just...so in keeping with the tone of the series that Leon gets what he wants for one little moment and then forgets it. This is both lovely and sad.

M...so I wasnt the only one struck with the blatant romanticism of that moment? Good...I love it, my dear...

xD! Oh wow that was great I loved it I really did the whole Hakuna matata thing made me laugh and it flowed pretty well I wouldn't know about the Oocness if there is any but I liked how it went in this. ((Sigh)) :3 Well That's all I got ((Lurks off)) o.o That sounds so wrong... Ahem. :D Bye.

Oh, that's just lovely!

One of the few instances when D and Leon have a conversation without tea!

It's a shame that Leon won't remember the fact that D smiled for him. _

That was awesome! ]3 I, myself, have been working on a Petshop of Horrors fanfic. (( Since my friends have threatended to kill me if I don't make one for them... O o;; )) Anyway, keep up the good work! )

I thought this was rather good. And the way Leon asked D to really smile for him... that was so sweet!

I felt that the beginning was a little awkwardly worded; it a little like an unweildy pen, but by the midsection and end, the two characters smoothed out. I especially liked how the circuits in Leon's brain fried for a moment; reminded the reader that while Leon and D seem to be the perfect match, D *is* a little more than human and it might be all for naught in the end. Subtle and not in your face. XD

woo! good good! really good i liked it only a little to short for my taste, but it would be to boring if you dragged this one out to much,i like it just the way it is.

keep up the great wrighting!_

T.S.Y

I didn't see anything wrong with how you portrayed Leon and D. In fact, I really liked how much Leon stumbles while trying to explain that he wants D to smile 'cause he's never seen him really smile. _

The only thing that irks me is...they're not going to remember this! . Ack. Though they might get some bad deja vu if they ever have this kind of conversation again.