Whaat?

It was one of the day when Kel wake up before dawn as always. She started practicing until Neal came to her room. Every time she saw

his hazel eyes her heart was beating.

"Kel, Raoul waiting for you hurry up," said Neal.

She was wondering with who in love Neal. And it will be embarrassment if he will she have a crush on him.

What? That made zero sense.

That was just random. And not in a good way. It wasn't even funny. But I like the fact that both Neal and Dom like Kel. That's cool.

oh my god I think that's the best one yet,

I hope you know i'm joking...

umm... okay? that was... fast...

you might want to add a second chapter... i don't get it

i don't like Kel/Dom fics, but this was good - if a little OTT on the sweetness.

what? that was so random. gosh.

i liked

oke doke girl, do you need some help? that was really abrupt, but funny. i liked it a lot, just umm, maybe you need some soothing drinks:starts to edge away:lol i luved it. i just always wanted to b like those guys who tell raoul in Squire that a kinght's life is all glory. kk really good, is it gonna b a one-shot?

please say no-or yes, or wutever you want to say, as its ur story

They certainly got together pretty quickly! Neal though- *sigh* - when will he ever learn that pretty ladies are not the center of the universe?

LoL

This was really good though... I like how you made it so Neal and Dom were fighting over Kel and she was oblivious to it...

I also like how you had all the people in New Hope were watching the duel except for Kel. That was a nice touch.

P.S. Is this a one shot?

Well, duh, it's screwed. It's supposed to be FUNNY. Alianne writes short, quick, funnies, seen as, if she wrote a longer story, she would get bored, and never finish. You should hear the song she wrote the other day...

That was a little rushed and weird but interesting lol

OMG, that was very interesting... but i dont know if i liked it much. I don't think Neal would just go up to some random girl and ask her to marry him. Keep trying, and maybe your next story will be a little better.

I think you ended the story a bit too quick, the begin is okay it just... no one will ask you to marry in first sight, right. I'm not criticizing things it's just a bit akward in the end that's all. Love ur Story!

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