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Despite the depressing undertones of this fic, I found this quite interesting. Especially the ending, it was sorta fluffy and adorable and totally worth the read!

dude this is cool, and the anime only rants on about cards!.

AW!! That was so cute!! See, Bakura can be nice sometimes!!

I've heard of her and this was a good oneshot.

Wow... that was.. kinda... beautiful. *sniff, sniff* Really awesome fic. ^-^

This is such a nice story, I'm adding it to my favorites! ^^ Love everything about it, there is no poing in explaining what I do and what I don't. ^^

Okay, first of all I just want to say that I really really really liked it! It's very hard to find stories that have Bakura caring about Ryou without any actual romantic feelings (Don't get me wrong, I love yaoi, but I liked brotherly/guardian relationships first. ^__^)

I liked Your take on Amane's story and how she gave him the Change of Heart. The Angel doll was also a nice touch. their relationship was really sweet.

Bakura was totaly harsh on Ryou, but he did get through to him. I'm glad that worked out. And It wwas so sweet how he covered him with the blanket and then carried him up to his room. And then he even fixed the doll for him! AW! *^__^*

Alot of subtle hints in there that really added to the story. Like Ryou trying to commit suicide and stuff. It was actually a nice touch.

And now on a more depressing side, I would like to comment on the other reviewers comment, because that was kind of a harsh review. First of all, I would like to poit out that this *IS* a FANNON comunity. Therefore, calling him Ryou abd Hikari makes perfect sense and is nothing to be repremanded for. More people use it than not. And another thing is that Ryou, both in English and Japanese verions, is from ENGLAND! As such hiis father is fully entitled to an english name.

The point of this, don't let that review get you down because this is a really amazing story and you have alot of talent. So...

GOOD JOB!

A nice idea, and sort of cute, though you misspell Amane in the first paragraph, as well as in your Author's Notes. Attention to detail is generally a good thing, especially regarding character /names./

Although Bakura-kun's father's first name is unknown, considering that they're Japanese, having "Stephan" be his first name is more than a bit unrealistic. Either avoid giving him a first name, or pick something actually Japanese.

Having the dark entity with a separate body is an overused, incorrect fandom cliché, that is completely unfounded within canon storyline. Dark entities don't get seperate bodies from their hosts. Also, Bakura-kun, as well as the other two host characters, are never referred to as "hikari." That's only another incorrect fandom convention. The actual term is "omote" or "surface." And even that term is never used by the Dark Bakura for his other self - he uses either "yadonushi" - "host" or "goshujin" - "landlord."

Nor does he, or anyone main character, refer to the Surface Bakura-kun by his first name of Ryou. Amane /could/ use it, being family, though she'd be more likely to use some form of brother. His father could use it. But no one else would. Everyone within the series refers to him as Bakura.

Characterization was a bit off; the dark entity doesn't view his host as anything but property. I enjoyed your mention of Bakura-kun not really admitting to his sister's death - although having him put flowers on her grave sort of negates that. If he really doesn't believe she's gone, why would he go to a place marking her demise? It would only hurt his denial.

The Dark Bakura's mocking words to his host were also fairly good; it's nice to see him taunt him with being alone and lacking friends. If the entity were to bother to speak to his host, he likely would be more than a touch mocking and sarcastic of him. ...Although, his reasoning seems to be a bit off; to the dark entity, his host is property, or at best, a toy. If there would be any reasonable way for that view to alter, it would take quite a bit of development, and with the shortness of this fic, that's not possible.

Overall, a bit trite, with some minor grammar errors, and somewhat more major characterization issues, but still rather cute.