Ellone didn't abandon him. She was taken away to be experimented on. But I suppose that doesn't matter to Squall.

I feel so bad for Squall... and I don't feel in the least sorry for Laguna. I think you captured Squall's inner torment quite well. Squall would be extremely hurt by Raine leaving again... and would feel like he was being rejected again and again.

hm...a very interesting path you've set this alternative story on. Nothing against your style of writing (I like Pupu's Saga, although I've yet to finish reading and reviewing :D), but personally I feel this fic got off on the wrong foot. Dont get me wrong, I love how you decided to take the task to give it a twist! Very interesting/intriguing! It's just the whole situation seems unprobable, and hey, that's my personal opinion. It just doesn't seem right. And, I know you didn't start the fic out so it's not your 'fault', heheh I'm not blaming anyone... there's no blame needed, (yes yes.. I'm using the fic's words.. whatever! heh!) But really, somethings were unsettling. Characters were like mixing flats with sharps (musically, you know?). Example, I didn't consider Raine to be such a..wimp? I dunno, perhaps I've become biased to her from reading Arafel's "Storm Front" (It's a really awesome story, have you read it?) But, on a whole, without my biased/optimistic opinion, I'd enjoyed it! Yeah...ok, change the word 'enjoy', cuz it was kind of angsty? The story itself, was quite a good deviation from Arian's original. Both, in fact, were good! :D

Here's something to check...

she probably wasn't [to] reluctant to leave him

"too"

hey! i've a few new chapters out! ) and can u give me the link to The Orphan Series?thanks!

I read this on another site and searched here to find this one. I don't know if you'll read this review but this story is really good- I also remember reading the original fic and not being satisfied with the way it turned out. Is this the end of the fic?

I loved this story! You HAVE to write more!

i know this sounds silly, but after rereading this first part, i feel inspired to write the second part. here we go!

I believe I've read this chapter before...hmm...it seems familiar to me.

Whoa...talk about a disfunctional family...j/k. heh, Squall must have really been scarred for life to do all that. And don't get me started on Raine...for once I can describe someone who truly needs to "stop speaking unless she can improve on the silence."

Good job Jer! The tension you created was great. ;)

note: This is based on "The Stray - Part 1: The Highway" alone. I haven't read Arian's "Reviresco" yet.

As usual, Jer, the writing was beautiful. I guess I should read Arian's story, shouldn't I? I have no idea what's going on. But nevertheless, I loved this. :) I loved the part where Irvine was..well *hitting* on Raine. Ya know? :) Good job Jer, like always.