lol good job i know u wrote this years ago and i hope u still use this site coz i just wanna say that this had me hooked more then all the star wars movies (accept AOTC & ROTS)

when the same perso nis talking YOU KEEP IT IN THE SAME PARAGRAPH!

Umm Padme is with the accent on the e facing the other way. You're using è when it should be é. It's okay though, and good story =)

If George Lucas knew you had written this, he would cry, vomit, set it aflame, and then vomit some more. It sux!! XP

It's beautiful. I loved the angst, the drama...and the eventual soft acceptance. Plus, the look on Anakin's face at the end? PRiceless. Lol.

NO! HE'S SUPPOSED TO STAY GOOD, AND CONTINUE LOOKING HOT! Well Written though, wonderful job

The sith lord's name is Darth Palagieus thw wise. Just so you know.

wow! good chapter, keep it up! cant wait for another awesome update!

LOVE IT! Going on to read more now!

Gr...Why does Anakin have to be so stupid?!

Nice job though, I like it.

i likey

I look forward to more!

Aww man... Anakin still becomes Vader in the mask... Darn... but it was still a good chapter. Very well-written. Update soon!

NO! Don't make Ani evil! Or if you do, don't make Padme die! It has to be different somehow, right? Well, this is really good so far. Update soon!

Cool, but I hope we have some new material in the next chapter.