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| The Black Flame Phoenix 2008-04-08 ch 14,  | abuseplease update soon cause this story is great and I can't wait to read more of it. |
| lost-n-the-mist-courtney 2007-09-26 ch 14, | abusebut...but...but... i just got into ur story!! |
| an InuHanyou by birth 2005-12-22 ch 13, | abuseAHH! i loved it! please continue |
| xxWolfxx 2005-11-25 ch 13, | abuseGreat story the story I finshed reading 10 min ago was a fuken shity one all the words mest up. And the fact that harry potter and kagome ended up to gether was werid. Kagome should of ended up with moufboy (I think moufboy is hot on this new harry potter movie "HARRY POTTER AND THE GOBLITE OF FIRE " just alittle OH AND HE IS A FUKEN BADASS! lol I like my men alittle bad giggle) oh yah great story agian please finsh please (puppy dog eyes) onigie (meaning PLEASE) |
| Takagouzawa Hikari-san 2005-11-25 ch 13, | abuseokay...so InuYasha's the father? great story |
| duckgirl566 2005-11-25 ch 13, | abuseWRITE COMPLICATIONS! I love that story! XP |
| Hedgehogmadhatter 2005-11-05 ch 12, | abuseI dunno...I guess you could skip ahead to the future and just show everyone being really miserable..that always seems to work for me LOL! This is good and you do like to write shorties but it works. has lost it's mind and deleted all my hits & stopped sending me emails. I hope you get this review dispite the tech problems. Kagome is always so rough on Inu, even when he doesn't deserve it. Yet when she needs to stand up to him and fight for him she always sits down. I wonder if it's because she's 15. U should do Inu on Jerry Springer. My boyfriend is cheating on my with my dead ex..that would be good. I read one like that with Sailor Moon once. too funny or the 10 gruesume deaths of Naraku...faces of death. haha. Okay now I am gonna go clean my house before my friends get here. Peace! |
| Hedgehogmadhatter 2005-11-05 ch 4, | abuseso will the baby have ears! and does Kagome have medical insurance? Does the delivery room have the equipment to restrain Inu when he freaks out during the birth? He can fight Naraku but I bet he faints during child birth. dun dun dun |
| Hedgehogmadhatter 2005-11-05 ch 3, | abuseThis is cool, I like the first person perspective...and I do think you are secretly a Sesshy fan girl! Bwhahahahaha Poor Inu, he couldn't get a break even if he was dropped on his head. :o) |
2005-10-02 ch 12, anon. | abusewhy not do both skip as much time as you want but have flash backs |
| duckgirl566 2005-08-25 ch 12, | abuse8th month. Update soon please! I give this * (5 stars) |
| DarkGoddessAluthri 2005-08-17 ch 12, | abuseHey! Sorry it took me so long to read your fic, but I only just checked my mail! Anyways, first of all I'd like to thank you for reviewing my story, and second, I'd like to review yours! This story is coming along great, I think. Your chapters are a little short, so you could try typing a chapter, then going back and adding a bunch of details about it all. You'd be amazed at how quickly your chapters get longer, and the sensory details give your work a more polished sound. So length and an improvement in writing all in one! Pretty good, yeah? And I just want to bring to your attention that in the first chapter when you're doing Inuyasha's little segment, it seems like you couldn't decide on writing in first person or third person. You might want to go back and edit that... But other than that, I love this fic! It's really great. As for whether you should have Kagome in her seventh month or give poor Inu-kun more time, my vote is to give him more time. It really wouldn't make sense for her to be in her seventh month, because then she would have figured out she was pregnant LONG ago and would probably even be past the morning sickness part. So it just wouldn't fit. Plus, she would be showing, and since she went to visit Inuyasha, he would have seen and been able to tell. That's my thinking anyways. Do what you want, and don't let others tell you what to do! If you want to make her far along, just go back and edit some stuff and do what you want! Afterall, this story is yours, not anybody else's. Keep up the good work! |
| BoxerBitch 2005-08-16 ch 12, | abuseHm...well, I don't know. They both seem like good ways to go. Just take the advice from another reviewer because I guess I'm not a very good helper at Inuyasha stories! Thanks for reading my fma fic! ~Karrissa |
| animefan103 2005-08-13 ch 2, anon. | abusepuke |
| animefan103 2005-08-13 ch 1, anon. | abusesorry it makes no sense |