Reviews for Pazaak: Juma Rules

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MOCHS 2007-02-06 ch 10, anon.	abuseGreat story! But I can't seem to read chapter 9 though... Keep getting some sort of error =(
redxlover 2007-01-17 ch 10,	abusewipes eyes it's so beautiful...lol, well done.
SpasticImpulses 2006-07-15 ch 6,	abuse:: She had always protected herself from getting too close to others. Where she had physical intimacy, she had protected herself by blocking the emotional. Where she had emotional intimacy, she had protected herself by keeping them at arms length. At the time she dismissed it as following the code, but in reality it was more than that. She realized now that she had been scared of letting anyone get too close to her. :: Wow, that sounds so much like me it hurts! Lol Love teh characterizeation! I wouldn't be suprised if this was a cut scene from the game or somthing! Noelle
Akeera 2006-02-04 ch 1,	abuseThis is a really good + original concept. I was extremly amused (aka falling on my butt laughing).
Manga5Lore 2005-12-23 ch 10,	abuseA good idea with a pazaak match between the crew. It’s nice enough with Hk’s comments, Mical’s naivety, etc. However there seem to be certain elaborations here which are unsupported by the game; For example you have Bao-Dur tell a tale about the Exile, but in-game he tells Atton that he knows nothing about the Exile because he was just a technician and (in this case) she a general. This also means that he can’t really offer any kind of advice to Atton about her, as you have him do later. The meditation scene between Atton and Vashti is nice, even if Atton doesn’t strike me as particularly romance-able. Amusing that he would ogle her on the inside with the Force. Your Exile doesn’t come off as being particularly Jedi, and while it somewhat falls in thread with the story, I’m not sure how well it works overall. Having Revan behaving like this worked because he/she had those false memories, but the Exile doesn’t have that luxury so this un-Jedi behavior is somewhat strange, even if you try to explain by the epilogue. All that aside, there are some issues regarding the characterization of both Bastila and Canderous. Bastila in particular is highly out of character here. To start with Canderous: Kreia practically blackmailed him to go along with the Exile. He isn’t part of the crew of his own free will, so he really has no reason to be friendly toward any of them, nor tell them anything private as he does here. Moreover, he isn’t nice. He does not have a heart of gold beneath a tough exterior. He is from a culture where killing other people and razing worlds is OK just for a challenge. On Taris he isn’t proud of killing women and children, but only since they are weak, they are no challenge and bring him no honor. Actually killing them does not bother him. Bastila on the other hand believes in the Jedi teachings that all life is sacred. Take a look at what she say whenever the pc does something bad or otherwise exploit people. She will even use force persuade from time to time if the pc doesn’t. She has high moral standards; Carth is willing to let Sunry go even though Sunry is guilty, Bastila isn’t willing to allow it. She also follows the Jedi code closely and is not particular willing to get involved with anyone. She is completely out of character in that whole scene with Canderous. Having these two in any kind of relationship, much less just get along is inherently out of character for both of them. As demonstrated by the first game, Canderous quite simply does not respect any Jedi save Revan (and according to Kotor2 apparently those that followed Revan to war). He has no respect for the worldview and values of the Jedi, and by extension he has no respect for Bastila. The one banter he and Bastila have is ample proof of that. Bastila would find Canderous’ outlook on life and his values utterly repulsive as it contradicts everything she believes in. Accepting those values or living among the Mandalorians is thus out of character for her. She also has a very strong sense of duty (as strong as Carth’s), so having her arbitrarily leave the Order to live among the Mandalorians is in itself highly out of character for her. Looking at the way Bastila is OOC here, strongly suggest to me that no particular research was done for this fic. For example try the first game with a Male Revan and see how Bastila reacts to his advances. If you can’t be bothered to research a character for your fic — or if you just don’t like the character — then please don’t try to write them. As demonstrated by the OOCness of both Bastila and Canderous it will just make your fic look bad. So, while the fic in general is nice, it is somewhat ruined by the mis-characterization of Bastila and to a lesser extent Canderous.
Phoenixasending 2005-10-26 ch 10,	abuseI love this story, especially how it starts out random and then develops a sort of psuedo plot. I think it would be a really great idea to write episodes were they recruit people i know i'd love to read em.
Cliff Zingler 2005-08-14 ch 10,	abuseEl Dag Yo. The ending was too cute! I loved the whole thing. Clever, funny, witty, romantic. 'tres perfect!! -^^-
Ewanlover64 2005-08-14 ch 10,	abuseExcellent ending to a wonderful tale.
Ewanlover64 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseLOL! That would be so funny to see Mical drunk!
Amber Penglass 2005-08-11 ch 10,	abuseAw! meltmeltmeltmelt Loved it! Geh, I have class in the morning...gonna be running on four hours sleep...sigh but it was worth it. ^_^ Wonderful job!
Roach4Life 2005-07-18 ch 10,	abusesequel? DONT LET\| IT NEAR OBSIDIAN! -bursts into laughter-
gekkeiju 2005-07-14 ch 10,	abusei do hope you write more! this was such a beautiful ending-i love other people's babies. i quite like the idea of gathering the force sensitives-it always bothered me that the Exile would have to leave everyone. its better this way.
Trillian4210 2005-07-12 ch 10,	abuseOh no, it's over. :( Well done. I was laughing my ass off on more than one occasion while reading this. The end especially which I won't ruin for those who read reviews before the fic, but I thought it was so sweet. I also really loved your insights into Kreia and the notion of having blindspots to explain why she brushed off Bao-Dur and Atton. Really, really clever. Great job, I really enjoyed it.
Malinear 2005-07-12 ch 10,	abuseLet me first admit to being a horrible reviewer...in meaning that I just don't do it. Well, next to never anyway. That being said, I couldn't not reply to this one. I've been reading pretty much since chapter 1 and would have been happy if you'd just left off with the crazy game of pazaak. I was tickled pink when you actually continued on with the story though. You've done a fabulous job with your characterizations (how can you not love Atton when he's like that?) and it's made me want to actually pull the game out again just so I can see him and the exile bickering at one another. The ending made me cry a little, it was very touching. I loved the little bit you added with Tanvi. Gave an interesting insight into exactly how much she was saving, not just Atton right then and there. In short, fabulous job and thank you for the splendid entertainment!
LuvsDelkoSpeed 2005-07-11 ch 10,	abuseAw. That was a great story. I especially loved the ending. So sweet. Wonderful story. Rock on.

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