I loved it. I thought it was beautiful and fit Hiei rather well. You're a great poet. I aspire to be as good as you some day.

cool. simple - true - untrue - unYYHish - YYHish - and kinda good. but whos POV? i bet people will say its kinda hard 2 understand though.

nice tone very well done. i can relate so i find this true.. in some ways. i hope you keep writeing.

in the words of kenshin _x oro

hidden meaning, warrior kids, leveling towns(it acually rhymes) exellent peice, I hope to see more :)