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| Mrs_Biggerstaff 2007-03-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseYour story was good. But maybe it doesn't reli neat (arranging of the paragraph). So I was a bit confused with the story.. But beside tht, it was very interesting. Keep ur good stuff, pal! :) |
| Ritchan-san 2005-07-02 ch 1, anon. | abuseYour style is a little hard to understand. And, in Shorty's dream, did Heat start rapping (singing), or raping (molesting?), because you wrote raping, and that made no sense. Otherwise, a pretty good fic. |
| FireflyDino 2005-06-05 ch 1, | abusewoow good fic!! I want more ShortyxHeat! n_n Please continue soon!! |