Your story was good. But maybe it doesn't reli neat (arranging of the paragraph). So I was a bit confused with the story.. But beside tht, it was very interesting. Keep ur good stuff, pal! :)

Your style is a little hard to understand. And, in Shorty's dream, did Heat start rapping (singing), or raping (molesting?), because you wrote raping, and that made no sense. Otherwise, a pretty good fic.

woow good fic!! I want more ShortyxHeat! n_n
Please continue soon!!