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NefariousImp 2006-10-25 ch 9,	abuseI'm hooked. Please hurry and update! Pheobe always seems so bored! Why? She's a peppy person. You're doing a great job though keep up the good work!
The Eromancer 2006-10-22 ch 1,	abuseya know for a change how about instead of always having Harry and his group of teenagers meating up witht eh second generation of Halliwells and goign threw all HIS adventures, ya change it up a bit, eh? Ya know like sometime AFTER Harry gets done with the whole Voldemort Issue and he just wants to get away so he moves to America and loo and behold... ends up moving in next to the Halliwells! I'm sure you could potentialy sneek him into ANY of the seasons and put him into any of the pairings. Just change up a few things here and there to fit how he does magic in with the Charmed series and wala! instant perfect storyline. WHY CAN'T PEOPLE THINK TO DO THIS?!?!?!?! I'M TIRED OF SEEING THE SECOND OR CURRENT GENERATION GOING TO HOGWARTS... IT'S!! BORING!! AND "OVERUSED"!
GiGiHealys 2006-08-13 ch 1,	abuseAh, I just love Harry Potter/Charmed crossovers :D. Great story!
Drusilla Braun 2006-08-07 ch 9,	abusePlease please please continue I'm really interrested in where you are going to take this. Please continue.
Dragon Ladysupreme 2006-04-17 ch 9,	abusePhoebe is always so cute. I just thought maybe you'd want to know some of the younger Phoebe's quirks, as they were shown in the series. Such as, when wanting to ignore people back home, she'd plug up her ears and sing 'row, row, row your boat' over and over. Then, if the person would get closer, she'd threaten to sic Prue on the person. That, and back home, she'd scream and run for Grams. Other than that, Cinderella is her favorite story. They never say how old Phoebe is in the episode, but she does look to be around 11. If the link shows up, it's here that also shows a picture of 'little Phoebe': en. (Copy and paste, if it did, up there.) I love the episode, even if it's AU, and can't wait to read more. Ganbatte!
MONKEYMONKEYMONKEYMONKEYMON... 2006-03-23 ch 9, anon.	abuseI LOVE this story!! It is the BEST ever!! UPDATE!! TY SOO MUCH!! ~MONKEYMONKEYMONKEYMONKEYMONKEY~
TheNiceBlairWitch 2006-02-25 ch 9,	abusethat was really good. update soon.:p
BrownToneGirl 2006-02-02 ch 2,	abuse"We all shared a birthday, although Piper was now thirteen and Prue was now fifteen. I went over and plopped down onto the couch next to Prue while Grams came in and looked on at us." Wow, you know, that's kinda funny, I mean, who would now that Prue could be a Scorpio and Piper a Gemini even thouht they were born on the same day?! (look ma! I can have to zodiacal signs in just one day! just like Prue, Piper and Phoebe!) Um...I understand that they got what they wanted...call me curious but...what was it exactly that they wanted? You never told us... "smiles plastered on our faces" You used that phrase two times in the same chapter... Also, gram's POV is Patty's. Change that. Another thing...why doesn't Prue want Phoebe to go to Hogwarts? you give us no reasons whatsoever for this. Hey...where's Hagrid's accent? I mean, it sure does seem like he has one in the book... ...something else I noticed was that Phoebe seems to think it's all a joke, and Grams never convinces her otherwise...so...why is she so excited about going to Hogwarts? and why does this school sound so normal for Prue? I mean, I assume that if Phoebe doesn't know about it neither does Prue... Ok...I would read the whole story if it was entertaining at all and if you had a decent grasp of the characters that could hold my attention for more than 10 minutes, but since I usually break my own rules, I'll keep reviewing the next chapters.
little-angels-razorblade 2006-02-02 ch 3,	abusethis was another crappy chapter. it's not really the story but the fact...never mind it's the story. comments: 1-"I awoke September first" should be I awoke on September first. 2-"getting my last minute preparations ready" should be doing some last minute preparations. 3-you said that grams wouldn't let phoebe leave without eating like in to sentences one right after the other only worded them different. 4-"depositing my bags" sounds like she is at a bank. should be setting my bags down. 5-i never knew you could drive from san fransisco to london. did u? 6-im not going to waste anymore time on reviewing this chapter because it sucked. you plagerised the whole thing. at least give credit to the book.
little-angels-razorblade 2006-02-01 ch 2,	abusei just couldn't resist leaving another review. (that is not a good thing). this is a craptastic story. plagerism, plagerism, plagerism, plagerism. comments: 1-Grams said that she was going shopping for school supplies next weekend then she waits for weeks before she goes. your inconsistent. 2-How does the wizarding world know who phoebe is? huh? 3-you killed the whole book. you almost copied it word for word. it sucks. i hate it. you copied and the plot is so not original. yuck. crap. horrible. im sad and dissapointed in this fic. although im going to review the chapters just for kicks.
little-angels-razorblade 2006-02-01 ch 1,	abusei decided to review one chapter each day cause it would take to much time for me to read it all right now. it's an okay story. pretty good, but i don't really like hp/charmed crossovers. seem to corny to me. now for my comments. 1-you don't forget about letters just because of a breeze. you just don't. no one is that stupid. 2-the fact that they all shared a birthday is...(searching for right word)gay. crappy. stupid. corny. idiotic. don't really know. my best guess would be stupid. 3-you say they all got what they want, but then you don't tell us. details like that make stories better. 4-the girls seem like one person. they all share a birthday, all get what they want, and say stuff in usion. give them personalities please. 5-a combined b-day party. no 15 year old would want the same party as and 11 year old. get real. 6-'all had smiles plastered on our face' sounds like paint. or construction . plastered. odd. 7-in grams point of view, you made a mistake. you said "I held the letters up to penny." grams name is penny. 8-why didn't piper get a letter. prue and phoebe both got one. if it was that hogwarts didn't think piper would want to go cause prue didn't then why did phoebe get one. 9-"Before anyone could say anything else i went straight upstairs, after Grams said you welcome that is,". that makes no sense. no one had time to say anything but they did. i am not sure what it's called exactly but i think it's contradicting yourself. that's all for chapter one.
Laurel 2006-01-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseIts been ages since you've updated please update soon!!
xXdragongalXx 2005-11-27 ch 7,	abuseplease please please please please please please update thank u for listening to me
laurarose 2005-11-25 ch 7, anon.	abuseis this story going to be exactly like the 1st hp book?
WitchyChar 2005-11-24 ch 7,	abuseGreat Story. I want Phoebe to get her powers all of them, premonition, levitation and empathy. That would be very interesting. I love this story, it's so good. UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON! UPDATE SOON!

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