This piece was very intense. Nice work.

w-h-o-a..
me like.. ME LIKE..!
lol
very good story (despite the rather short word count =P )
^^ keep the great writing up!!
awaiting your next piece...

Short, but really good.

Nice to see more writers of Yuuhi/Ceres. You know how to capture emotions, wrench the heart, and make their love for each other tangible possible with the usage of only a few words! If you truly only intend this to be a oneshot then I have no complaints, albeit I think you would be quite skilled in making it longer.
I think you should do something about the parentheses, though. I don't know...they make the fic seem interrupted somehow.

This was good! I love this pairing! Well see ya!

*gasp and applause*
SCORE!
please update soon! You have a new fan...

-MysteryALASKA..

write more please, let it be more than a one-shot, that was so well written i would love to read more! - ta ta

YES! Finally someone that thinks like me. I think Yuuhi and Ceres had a thing going on. Sure Ceres still loved Shiso, but Yuuhi made her forget his badness. From the very beginning she assured him she'd never hurt him. And the kisses obviously made her vulnerable because it allowed her to loose control of Aya. Yep, I wish Ceres was never in Aya and Yuuhi could have her. Yuuhi deserves a beautiful woman.

I know it's a one-shot, but I wish you'd write more... anyway, this is very good! It's beautiful, I love this pairing, and I love the way you wrote this! Keep up the excellent work!

Wow...Beautiful. I mean, you read it once, and it flows beautifully. You read it aloud, and the sounds and words and emotions swirl around and become all poetic and mushy and stuff like that.
Beautiful. No, not beautiful...Pulchritudinous. Prodigious. "Prodiginus"

Wow...all I can say is wow...that was excellently written. I thought it was quite beautiful!