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INeverReview 2008-10-03 ch 16, anon.	abuseWow... Just... Wow. that was a really good story, even though I'm not finished (too lazy to go where the rest of it's posted>.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 9,	abuseTsunade is being stupid by making Naruto decide whether or not to accept being the next hokage within a month. His mate is still 2-3 months away from a high risk pregnancy. His mate is being hunted down by his homicidal brother-Naruto has sworn to protect him (and now Tsunade's sending him away on a mission that the Hyuuga clan should take care of)_how can he protect his family if he's being sent away and then has to be away from Sasuke for most of the day as Hokage? You'd think she could wait a year and let all this trouble pass first. But then you wouldn't have the angst and drama to write about, would you. I realized a few chapters ago that I read most of this story a while ago. I'm enjoying the 2nd read though. You're a good story teller. Thanks for sharing the story with us.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 8,	abuseSasuke's life is at risk. They take great pains to disguise him and care for him. Sakura swore herself to secrecy. She then tells Itachi that Sasuke's pregant; then after confessing to Sasuke what she did and crying her crocodile tears--i'm so sorry-...as soon as she's back in the gates of konoha, she goes and tells the gossip spreader Ino the secret. Sakura is a lying, conniving, manipulative, self-serving, selfish whore. How many more lives will she endanger? Please kill her before she opens the gates of the village to invite the killers in. I know you think it's humorous_and if it didn't involve risking the lives of Sasuke, Naruto and their children-it might be. But the combination don't mix.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 7,	abuseAfter reading this chapter-i see why you had naruto and sasuke fight last chapter-you did a really GREAT job writing this chapter. The heart to heart talks between the characters. The raw emotions. The depth of the feelings and the meanings of the words. It was really intense and really dramatic and really good. The only things I noticed were that you did not have Sakura warn Naruto and Sasuke that she told Itachi about Sasuke's pregnancy. You also have not had the book store girl tell them about Itachi coming to the village they're living in. And Sakura is a medical nin. She should be able to recognize the amount of baby chakra signatures inside of Sasuke-or even the # of heart beats. If she can run her chakra hands over his belly and tell him everything is fine-she should know what it is she's saying is fine. She could also have infused him with chakra to help his strength. I think it would be cool if Naruto could also infuse Sasuke with his Chakra because he's carrying Naruto's babies-that would help too. Kyuubi even might be able to use his enhanced senses to figure out how many babies there are.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 6,	abuse"being Naruto, pulling off that scene had hurt him, too, and alcohol seemed to be the only natural salve."_You have already told us that alcohol does not get Naruto drunk. It's hard to believe that Naruto would choose now to take his anger out on Sasuke; when he just discovered that he's having 2 babies (and why didn't he tell SaSuke that when he told him that he knew he was the father-that's a pretty important fact to leave out) and that something is wrong with Sasuke's health. He also knows that Sasuke's hormone's have him acting irrationally and he hasn't taken it personally yet--but he chooses now to take Sasuke's attitude as a personal attack. He read the baby book and knows all the bad things that can happen-which you kindly listed off for us--I'm sure there was also something about how stress could affect the health of mother and child--and he just added to it to make Sasuke even more sick. That's why I believe that you chose the wrong time to have Naruto act this out. You should have done it earlier in the story and this is the time they should be building their relationship. You have Naruto filled with concern in the first half of the chapter and then turned him into an uncaring, hurtful bastard the 2nd half--just didn't fit.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 5,	abuse"C) in need of someone to bitch at, and she really couldn’t tell anyone she knew,"__haven't read this chapter yet-but wanted to comment on your justification for Sakura's UNFORGIVABLE betrayal of Sasuke's confidence in her to keep his life threatening secret. The secret that could threaten his life, Naruto's life and the baby's life. I didn't find any humor in it. As far as she needed to vent and had nobody to talk to about it--well, that's what promising to keep a secret means-not talking about it__but if she needed to she could have talked to Kakashi, Naruto or Sasuke.You wrote that she was going to visit Sasuke once a month to check on the baby's health-she had an opportunity to talk about it every 4 weeks with the boys and anytime at all with Kakashi. If she could recognize Itachi's striking resemblance to Sasuke after getting drunk; I'm sure she would have been even more aware of it before she continued to drink and talk.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 4,	abuseLiked Naruto's time with Sasuke while Sasuke was napping on him; and the conversation he was having with Kyuubi. Didn't care for Sasuke's continued pushing Naruto away and treating him less than the super friend that he is. Really, Sakura didn't notice Itachi looking like Sasuke until after hours of telling all the secrets that she swore to keep secret-not just as a friend but as a physician. Her selfishness and arrogance and jealousy and pettiness has put Sasuke, Naruto, the baby and any innocent bystanders at risk. Will she even warn them? Will she be smart enough not to lead Itachi to them? Even if it hadn't been Itachi she was telling the secrets to in the bar-it would have been someone else--and what if people over heard the conversation--the whole village would know and that is so what Sasuke did not want. And she's a medic nin__doesn't she realize that he didn't want her to have his babies because she could not give birth to sharingan babies. You are going to have to do some serious Sakura bashing to make up for her behavior. Maybe even have her die a horrible death; trying to redeem herself to protect Sasuke and his baby. Yes-kill Sakura. I also think Naruto should man up and tell Sasuke that he remembers everything about the night they had sex and knows the baby is his--and that he's happy about it and would love to partner with Sasuke as parents and mates. It's selfish of Sasuke to keep Naruto's baby from him. It's like Sasuke stole a part of Naruto--that is so not honorable.
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 3,	abuseI liked your reveal of the true Naruto_letting people underestimate him-while he was actually in the know. Loved that he was 'Best Day' ever when he found out he was the father of Sasuke's baby. Enjoyed Sasuke's saying 'No, he's taken'; to keep the book store girl away from his man. Thought he shouldn't have yelled/ordered in the book shop for Naruto to fetch a book like a dog--brings too much attention to himself behaving like that. If Naruto is supposedly 'smart'; why did he almost call Sasuke, Sasuke while in the book store? Still enjoying the story-thanks
asm613 2008-09-25 ch 2,	abuse"(Sasuke had failed to inform him that the house had three bedrooms,"__how much of a retard would Naruto have to be to not notice the amount of rooms in a house he was staying at? Not such a big deal__but it does bring to mind that if you had Naruto sleeping on the couch--the least you could have done when you had Sasuke take a nap on said couch-would be to have Sasuke notice Naruto's scent and find comfort in it as he drifted off to sleep. It's an entertaining story so far. Thanks for sharing it-part of a story is better than none-sometimes.
alphabeticalescape 2008-09-24 ch 9,	abuseDid you skip grades or something? HMM, you wondrous, intelligent, makes everyone else feel like a dope, FREAK! And I guess you're going to sue China for better worker rights, stop terrorism by capturing Osama bin Laden with you knowledge of 15 radar systems in 50 different languages, and finally just for kicks, discover an edible rock in the Amazon thus ending world hunger, HMM? You're one of those, ARE YOU? But anyway, thank you for writing a sasunaru with a plot. It was really a wonderful discovery, I'm thrilled. They're so hard to come by, and even when they are the least bit coherent they're not nearly as deep as this so they can't get that emotional. And I need emo angst, emo angst and crying! Ahem, so applause for you, yes, that was where I going with this.
bgreenwivy 2008-09-21 ch 16,	abuseGood job. It is an interesting change. I won't say write more soon but I will say good luck with everything and I hope that at some point you can get back to it.
Nilyenea 2008-09-21 ch 16,	abusewow I love how you've written this story. The switches from different point's of view and back to a general one was handeled very well and smoothly. I am disappointed that it stops where it does. Have you had to discontinue this story? I would love to see how you finish it if you have the time and inclination to finish it up. Or did you go ahead a post it else where? Either way it's a wonderfull story up to the point it has gotten and I'm going to look into finding more of your works to enjoy. Thank you for the well written fanfiction I spent the last several hours enjoying.
FuriousDeragonmaji 2008-09-09 ch 16,	abuseYou have a wonderful fic going here, and I would be very appreciative if you continued it. I know it's been about 2 years since you last posted here, but I'll be waiting patiently for the day when you get a new chapter. ^^ Please keep up the fantastic work, if not on this one, then on other brainchildren you decide to indulge in. :D
24sakura 2008-09-06 ch 16,	abuseI re-read your fic. It's so good, please update! Please! (puppy eyes)
IncarnateofImpossibilities 2008-08-21 ch 16,	abusehello there! i have to say, this story has got to be one of the most amazingly entertaining things i have ever read! i admire your wit and greatly appreciate your sense of humor and blah blah blah oh screw this ima stop sounding like a stuffy college professor now. -ahem- YOU RULE! I love Sasuke's moodswings! they are kinda out of place, but not so much so as to make it weird and OOC. GOOD JOB!! please please please please please keep writing!! this story is too good to just let it die! oh, and i recently visted your LJ...the 'zombie jesus with drill and chainsaw for hands will save you or build you a desk' quote had me quite literally on the floor laughing. it cracked me up so much that i quoted you on my signature for a friend's forum. (...please dont hurt me, if you want me to take it off i will) anyway, i hope you keep writing, and i blame you for my utter obsession with InoShikaCho-lurv... -drools- they are so awesome. ~toodles!!

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