I can't help but give this one bit of complaint. Why must you include endless AUTHOR notes in every single chapter. Some of them are just useless, long winded, nonsense.

Do you have NO faith in your ability to tell a story without that need?

It is a right pain in the A$$ to edit all that (NON STORY) out of your actual story in order to read the story without potential spoilers or explanations as to why you did this or that. Let your writing and story telling, TELL ITSELF!

In other words. "IT IS NOT NEEDED" and in fact, takes away from an otherwise good story.

Use a Yahoo Group or Form to communicate with all your FANS. Please DO NOT communicate with your FANS in the actual STORY.

Some people actually include every single review and the authors response to all those people that actually review. Makes me want to upchuck!

Please use another FORM to do this, NOT YOUR STORY CHAPTERS.

Apart from that, I do like your story just not all the BULL you seem the need to include.

Steve

Arg, that's what I call a good, torturous Cliffhanger!

I can't wait to read the next chapter^^

So far this fic is just as good as its prequel^^ I loved every moment of it :D

Keep up the good work ;)


Cassia Lenoir

i would like to say that this chapter of the story is really good, i like the part about trying to fool ron and bringing ginny and harry together. your stories are really enjoyable.

corinacute

The funny thing is, I've read the last two chapters somewhere else. Did you publish them as a stand-alone story? I read them sometime before I started reading this story. Could someone have pirated them? I have no record of where they might have been.

Reviews are supposed to be constructive criticism. Since my pet peeves are spelling, punctuation, mangled homonyms, and missing words, and since I didn't find any, What could I say? The story is going great. I'm enjoying it. I see nothing wrong. So, I have no complaints. Just keep up the good work.

Regards,

cwejr

Good, want more! I see its been a while since an update, and I'm almost done with whats posted. So, erm, please?

TO HARRY!

Blue hair, yay! I loved the music insert by the way. I did that a lot in my unveiling story.

THis is so good, but I want, need, Harry to get his memory back in full. What doesn't kill us, makes us stronger, and I feel as though a large piece of Harry is missing, something that would indeed help him to better deal with this mess, a piece that he very much earned. The hard way.

Sorry, computer problems; here's the rest of the review for 10:

2/ You've evidently had some beta help, which I heartily approve of. They've let three recurring errors slip through, though:

a/ Elaborate. The British "U" in favour, honour, rigour and labour got added in Old French, and passed down to English. But "Elaborate" did not come down from Old French, it was added directly to English from Latin (

Hi!
I've been enjoying your stories, which I recently discovered. Your writing style is very engaging.
I was therefore surprised to see you urgently soliciting reviews in this chapter, saying that number of reviews was the only way to "rise in the rankings," or some such. Aside from the fact that writers (especially good ones) write because they just can't help it, stories (at least on fan fic dot net)sort themselves down the ranks purely by age: they supersede one another by most recently posted rather than by quantity of reviews.
Writers do write to be read; I think that if you can see that you have so many hundreds of readers, then you have proof that you're read. Reviews are nice, but they're just gravy.

I have two things that have bugged me, then I'll close:

1/ "Harry Gets Even." I'm still waiting for him to get even. It seems that the ministry and the d.e.s have had their revenge, but Harry hasn't! Other than terrifying the Slytherin trio and getting two arrested, anyway. When does our lad get his chance and have his way?

2/ You've evidently had some beta help, which I heartily approve of. They've let three recurring errors slip through, though:

a/ Elaborate. The British "U" in favour, honour, rigour and labour got added in Old French, and passed down to English. But "Elaborate" did not come down from Old French, it was added directly to English from Latin (

Excellent story so far. i prefer to read completed stories and review at the end. had hoped this sequel would be completed in time. will check back later and read completed edition. thanks.

Please tell me your not abandoning this story, it's already been more then 5 months since your last update.

I just finished re-reading HP7, and decided to come here, to satisfy my need of reading about Harry Potter.
You need to start writing a post HP7 fic, Rae, I think you'd be the best to keep on with Rowling's great work, and save us from the suffering that we'll never read a Harry Potter book beside those that are already written.

I love you Rae, and love the way you write :)

Flo (Firencita ;) )

I just finished reading through both stories in this arc and am happy to tell you how much I have enjoyed both. You do tell a story very well, so well in fact it is hard to stop. I had read HGE once before and can't recall now if I reviewed that but in case I didn't I thought it was quite brilliant. My only criticism would be that you shold probably read your work over a bit more carefully before posting. You might also look up words in a dictionary on occasion as I found a couple which I felt were misused. Pedantic comes to mind, in that it seemed not to fit the usage when Hermione was talking to Harry in the chapter 11. However, you clean up your work considerably better than many would-be fanfic authors, so no major complaints from me, for sure. You are eminently easier to read than many. As I said, in fact, your writing is quite captivating.

My only question about this story is why you feel the need to keep the impending wedding from Ron. I understand you portraying him as a gormless fool prat with severe personality dysfunction, but it would be good, I think, if you could explain why the need for deception as regards the wedding. I feel your portrayal of his character is perhaps a bit over the top, but then I think JKR did the world a disservice by saddling Hermione with him. Those two belong together almost as much as Harry and Draco. (retching just thinking about it, but then slash just ain't my bag)

Overall, I very much like your stories and your writing. I do hope you are able to continue this, as I've gotten quite interested in seeing where you go with it. Keep up the good work.

Vern