I LOVE the idea...

I think it would be a good idea, though, to take it outta script form...it makes the story more...real (or something like that...lol)

EX: "Well...wait a minute." Jenny said as she got up and opened the door. John Jr. stood there "Get out of my doorway John." Jenny ordered.

but other then that great GREAT ideas and i will be sure to continue reading this.

love it

script form is very hard to read, it makes it feel so stilted. Try writing it in story form with quotations for dialogue and it'll be much better. But it's a good idea although, why is Magda a freshman if she's 16? did she flunk or what?