Awesome so far, I just started reading. Just so you know, captains outrank commanders. "General" is more appropriate here. Though I'd give some advice!

Draconous

Very interesting story. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work

i think it's really sad that you have decided to leave this story unfinished. i thought that it was awesome. the writing is amazing and the characters have really developed their own distinct personalities that makes then unique. i hope that at some point you decide to continue.

i'm really sad that you haven't updated this story in so long, its awsome! i hope that at some point you decide to continue it as i think your great at writting this. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Absolutely fantastic! The characters are alive, the dialogues are bright and lively... The most fascinating story I've ever read. I love how you've changed the plot and characters of the original KOTOR, breathed new life into their actions. Eagerly waiting for more chapters!

Greatest fic i ever read

Wonderful! You have done a great job taking the basic KOTOR plot and making it your own. I can't wait for an update. Keep it coming!!

I love this story.

I read part of it on the KOTOR fanfic site, I'm glad I found it here.

I like the way you are using Juhani more, possibly flirting with Lal. And also Bastila maybe having a crush on Carth; she wont admit to it, but it does sound like she does.

Can't wait to read more.

The story is great: I like the changes you've made (except for Juhani, I think it was unfair to make her so young... poor thing). You added alot of realism to your main character's life; very good move. HeHe, to think Davik was stupid enough to let Lal into his buisness... he got what he deserved ;)
The only thing about your story though is that it seem it will take forever to complete lol!
I just wish Lal kept her wisdom instead of just her rebellious spirit, that would have given the masters a good scare :)
Keep up the good work!

I recall now this chapter has some of my favourite moments in it. When Lal remembers saying goodbye to Zhar, its gutwrenching given what happened to him last chapter.

Carth being a typical male when Bastila doesn't realize she's exposing herself..Heh.

And of course the intro to your darker HK. He's different, but he still amuses me.

It was nice to read it again!

O, yay!
I am a happy, happy woman. I read the whole thing through again, with the new chapters, and was just as thrilled as the first time I read it. Every one of your characters is fascinating and rock-solid consistent, and the whole story is full of nice, imaginative twists and delightful moments that make me either grin like an idiot or read the sections a half dozen times in sheer awe of your writing skills.
I suppose saying I'm dying for more would be rather obvious?

Wee! Wonderfull! I loved the new chapters! Your writing skills simply amaze me! I wish i could give you some better review telling you ideas on improving the story but damnit i simply think everything about it is great! All i can do is say thank you for continuing this story!

Awesome...what else can I say? Yours was one of the first stories I read back before became and I can honestly say that it was one of the best fics I've ever read. You bring so much life to the characters, even the relatively minor ones like Zaerdra. Simply amazing...keep it up!

Wow, I love this - love it! I seriously love all the changes you've made to the story (I now wish T3 was more like your AyVee!) and how you write all the characters and their interactions. The dialogue seems natural, witty and effortless. I find myself trying to read as fast as I can just to see what they have to say to each other. Some of Lal's sharp whipcrack comments had me rolling (Lal's first conversation with Carth was great!), so naturally I can't wait to see how you write Jolee or HK (if you decide to put them in). The way you write the action sequences is nothing short of amazing - it's like a movie is playing in my head (the swoop race - wow!) and there's no confusion as to who's doing what, where and to whom. Action appears to be difficult for lots of writers to capture, but you've got it down - it's suspenseful and highly entertaining. The other thing I love is that this story has a definite "Star Wars" feel - you use the lingo very well.
The only thing I'd ask is that you put some sort of extra space or an indication of some sort between scenes that break from one character's experiences to another character. Going from the crew terrorizing some Sith programmers to MIssion on a shopping trip makes me go, "Huh? Where'd she come from? Shopping? Oh, ok, we've switched scenes, I geddit." I know it's a little thing, but I think it would help immensely.
Anyhoo, fantastic stuff - sincere thanks for posting it. I'm on the edge of my seat awaiting more, more, more - please let there be more!

Hi

Great to see you posting this wonderfull story here. Hopefully we will be getting some new chapters too :)

Btw. You are currently accepting reviews from only those who have a account and are logged in. This might radically decrease the amount of comments you will get. This might be bad considering that games/starwars section probably gets less viewers than the movies/starwars does. Though maybe comments dont matter to you.

Anyway nice to see this story and lets hope for more! :)
Thanks!