YaY! I finally finished re-reading it! Now I remember why I stalked this story for so long! You should try and update this on its one year anniversary from the last post. That would ** so many people off. You should re-read this and the notes you put into it, so much has changed and it may help you continue on if you review what you have written. You are a different person now then when you started this and with the large (massively HUGE!) gap between updates your writing style will have changed. While with stories this is not normallay a problem, in this case it will be. Usually the writing style will grow and change subtly as the story progersses but with this one there will be a sudden jump. Also you are now in uni and have finished doing you A-levels!! Psychology isnt as exciting as they make it out to be. Trust me, I'm takining it. I hope this helped because I want you to update! Ugh, this is just one giant rambling paragraph that makes no sence, is badly spelt and has terrible grammer. Oh for the love of pineapples! I really need to shut up! You need more reviews! This story rocks! But then again this is a hidden gem that not many notice unlike that of the stories of Leo, Misao, CED and bnomiko and many others.

Free-chan xx

P.S. have you ever tryed Hershys (sp?) coz they rock! M!

O_O Oh no I didn't review this chapter! Oh no! I'm SO sorry Chen, I read this ages ago...I thought I had reviewed, I'm sorry... ;-;
This was such a great chapter though...Is it the end? It's not the end is it?! No, not the end! Or maybe it is...I'm not saying it would be a bad ending if it was, but still, I thought there was more...
I dunno, I'm in a weird mood today...Hehehe Me Luff Pugi and Charlio are all fairies today! Yay! *Sigh* Ah, the random funniness of it all...
Anyway Chenny-chan hope you're well and all is going OK, have a Happy Easter!

~Lia~

WOW! your story really rocks. the story line really flows, with all these twists and turns. Why arnt you an puplished author?! im guessing some of the ideas come from George Orwell's Nineteen Eighty-Four?
is it that Tristan feels quilty at not being able to stop what happened to the others, and has to stay awake to stop it from happening again?
i know how you feel the book im writing, i know how i want it to go but i cant get it into words... lol
no seriously this story is the best i've read, and i can not wait till the next chapter!
Myst49

I'm shifting off my lazy butt and finally reviewing! WHEE! LOL! No, firstly, I have to apologise. I've been reading this all the way through, but haven't reviewed until now. I generally do that. I end up having a big list of fics to review by the end of the month and it just doesn't occur to me to do it..*slaps wrist on your behalf* but all I can say really is that I adore this story...I really, truly adore it...you've got me hooked like a fish on a line! XD;; The idea is genius because it leaves open so many possibilities. A neighbourhood watch, big brother type set up that restricts love and our hero's valiantly fighting back! Wow...seriously...I really can't wait for the next chapter. This is a brilliant fic. Don't let lack of reviews get you down; many are probably just like me...very lazy. I mean, the good fics always get less...one of mine has lots and I think its one of the worst things I ever wrote, so...don't worry, ok? This is a brilliant fic and your writing style is as good as always. Hope to see some more soon! ^_^

lol...sorry but the first thing i had 2 comment on was, ryou and the ladybird. lol. Sorry but that got me into hysterics...was i meant 2? lol. But it was funny! You could imagine the frut=stration on bakura and maliks faces when they had 2 explain it to him. Genius poor genius. I still laugh about it if i think about it..'hes gone 2 a better place' lol. Ok now i shall shut up...^-^ hello again..c u knew i couldnt be quite 4 that long. GO EVIL YUGI! YAY THAT WAS TOTALLY AWESOME DUDE! SORRY THAT ROCKED! WOWNESS! GO EVIL YUGI! and it was Pegasus i was right! HAHA! Never say i am dumb again...lol...wait it me calls myself dumb..0.o how does that work? oh well..did i say Evil Yugi ruled? It was wicked though and i even liked the bit with Yami putting on the puzzle and yeah all that dark energy..it could be yugis form of bondage on yami u know..EVIL YUGI RULES!

I loved that scene also..the one with the trial...lol..and the hikaris were molesting him 0.o they were touching him up! WRONG! .> 0.0 it was ! heheh Bakuras a mum.lol..how ddi that happen? 0.0...wel it explains the long white hair thing going on then doesnt it. But i liked that scene it was so freaky and freaky in pugis eyes mean awesome! YAY! I just loved that scene...u must do another one like that! ITs wicked and how would yami be able 2 put that wig on with his hair? oh well I liked the whole chapter again and also yay 4 joey *mumbles* and seto...¬_¬ stupid ceo..but yeah they r now together well admitted their feelings really. SO YAY 4 THEM! well c ya around and good work again chen...oh and Lia pass us a shirt...i want 2 be in the club 2!

*+Pugi+*

ps...EVIL YUGI RULES!

"Der der der der da, der da der der dada der der dada der der…!" (Sorry I've had that theme stuck in my head for the whole chapter...)

Once again, another truely awesome chapter from Chen! ^^
I've really got into this story, I must admit it was a little slow at first (Please don't hurt me!) but you need the prolouge to understand stuff yada-yada-ya...
But now I must confess I'm quite a big Devils in the Church fan!! *fan club T-shirt and flags appear from nowhere* Yay, everyone join the fan club!

Ryou was so cute in this chapter! ^-^ Aw, blessies, the ladybird part was so sweet, poor thingy!! *Hugs Ryou*

But the entire Shadow Realm sequence O_O SCARY!! But also pretty awesome, and the Duke Trial scene was outta this world in terms of cool weirdness! (But...Bakura...his MOTHER?!?! @_@ WAHT?!)

So congrats on the cool chapter, sweet ending with Joey/Seto thing (I don't like the pairing as such, but I'm just saying it's an 'aww' moment type thing)

Oh and if your wondering about the dodgy time of my last review, I REALLY couldn't sleep cos of this huge backache so I read stuff to take my mind off of it. And I'm gonna try and stop crying at everything too...it's annoying when I'm trying to read with blurred vision!! But it's purely because of your excellent writing!!

Oh yeah and the whole Téa/Bandit Keith thing, I only suggested it cos I thought it'd be funny/ really annoy the guys if they ever find out she's with the guy who took the others away etc would've made, interesting, reading...but at least I didn't make a COMPLETELY SICK suggest like Weevil (Yes, Pugi, I saw your last review...yuck. And Yugi deserves everything bad he gets.)

Phew, this has been going on a while again...oh dear I really shouldn't take up your precious time with long winded reviews that make no sense and often stray off of the main subject!! So I'd better go, and remember peoples, if anyone is interested all D.I.T.C fanclub application forms should be send to the Kaiba Corp. building for varification etc.

Looking forward to the next chapter, see ya later Chen!!

~Lia~

SHESSH! WHAT IS IT WITH ME! I AM ALWAYWS SO LATE IN UPDATING...ITS NOT RIGHT! ;_; I'LL DO ANYTHING 2MAKE IT UP...I SWEAR! but anyway...im glad they finally got rescued...but actually it don't seem like it becuase of the mental dramas their going through...but i must say they are doing one thing wrong! THEY ARE SLEEPING OUTSIDE! ALL OF THEM! NO PEOPLE SHOULD BE DOING NIGHT DUTIES JUST IN CASE! ¬_¬ u never know who you can trust...^-^ but anyway..i love what you have done 2 each of them..ryou is now locked away somewere in his mind and is calling bakura big brother! heh. kinda reminds me of mawata a bit when she locks herself away in her mind..but instead hates everyone instead, but could you really imagine ryou doing that? oh well. Im glad those guys had tristan around though other wise ppor joey would of been in a very bad shape. and will seto ever find the courage 2 say what he wants! NEVER! im still worried about marik though, what happens the enxt morning..will he like rememebr all these people are around or wikll he go ahead and stab everyone! afterall he might think yami or bakura are other people dressed up and are hurting his friends and so out with the knife and stab stab stab! heh ^-^ but nayway...you know i have left something out don't you...AW POOR YUGI! WHAT DID YOU DO 2 HIM! WHEN YOU SAY TAINTED DO YOU MEAN! WAS HE RAPED?!?! 0_0 NO! DATS MEAN IF IT WAS THAT! ONLY YAMI CAN DO THAT STUFF 2 HIM! well not rape anyway...BUT AWW! IM GLAD YAMI CAME 2 HIS RESCUE AFTER ALL THIS. but why do i get the feeling things are going to go downhill again...oh well...POOR LITTLE SUNSHINE! well porr everyone really! so kaiwaii oh well...er...what else 2 say really..i agree with what lia said about téa..i want 2 know who she marries! maybe keith, pegasus anybody even weevil! but anyway..i really cant think of much more 2 say. Apart from nice work again and im looking forward 2 the next chapter..c ya

Lia: NO! I JUST SPENT HALF AN HOUR WRITING THE LONGEST REVIEW IN HISTORY AND I ACCIDENTLY SHUT THE WINDOW! CURSE THE KEYBOARD SHORTCUTS!
I'm sorry but I really can't find it in me to retype the entire deleted review, which was basically a long overview covering the previous four chapters...So this is a shortend form. I WILL do the long review, however, NEXT chapter. *hinthinthinthinthint*
Sorry dude!! ^-^'

Time of start: 03:30 am. That's right. AM.

Many apologies for the lateness of this. If any compensation, I just read the ENTIRE story again. Because I love this story!

But, there is one thing...

;-; YOU CAN'T LEAVE IT LIKE THIS! ;-; I must know what happens to them all!!
Oh Ryou!! He's so sweet, but it's so sad!! What did they do to the poor hikari! ;-; Poor Kura too, he goes all that way to find his love, who thinks HE is his "Big Brother!" ;-;

Mokuba: HEY! You stole my catchprhase!!

Lia: Shut it brat, Ryou's cuter then you'll ever be, so I declare HE keeps the phrase. Now scram!

Mokey: Meanie!! ;-; *leaves*

Lia: Anyway the whole Kura/Ryou thing is soo sweet but so sad and I love it and it's awesomely cool and yet bittersweetly tear-jerking and I have almost been in tears at the past two chapters! (and I don't cry a lot at stories too!)

Kai: Um, actually you cry at ANYTHING romantically sad these days.

Lia: DO NOT!! Prove it Hiwatari!!

Kai: *produces three-foot long list entitled "Things Lia Cried At" Lemmes see, there's the ending of Kingdom Hearts, the part in Final Fantasy IX where Freya realises her true love's forgotten her and also where Kuja does suicide Ultima, then there's the part in FFVII where Sethiroth kills Aeris...

Lia: Um, I was LAUGHING at that...

Kai:...then there was the endings of several films, including City of Angels, Moulin Rouge, The Green Mile...

Lia: I cried at the Green Mile BOOK, not the film...

Kai: oh, yes, the teary book list...The Amber Spyglass, The Green Mile, huh? you cried at Interview With The Vampire?!

Lia: He should be with Arland, it was true eternal love! ;-;

Kai: Whatever. Oh and don't get me started on certain songs...*starts anyway* Behind Blue Eyes, Hikari, Funeral of Hearts, and--

Lia: I DO NOT cry at all these things, honestly, I--

Tala: FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, WILL YOU SHUT UP?!?! WE'VE HEARD ENOUGH ALREADY!!

Kai: Whatever.

Lia: Oh shut up, both of you are so rude. Honestly, are you going to go away or do I have to write another one of 'those' scenes...?

Kai n Tala: MEEP!! *run away*

Lia: Sheesh...CHEN!! YOUR STORY RULES! Kura and Ryou-chan!! ;-; Does the angel that Kura loves come back or will he be like this forever? Oh no you can't do that, poor Kury!!

You have to write another chapter, please! Or I shall continue to bug you with unrelated e-mails and reviews involving random characters from different animes! SO PLEASE FIND NIRVANA--er, I mean, find your inspiration! DO I HAVE TO DO THE 'NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE' DAMNCE?!?! Because you know I will!!

PLEASE CONTINUE! I HAVEN@T SLEPT FOR THREE DAYS! (but that's unrelated to your story complety! ^-^' heh...

your (manic) fan

~Lia~

P.S: Hey wasn't Téa getting married off by the council? What happens to her while the others are rescuing their loves? Sorry I just wondered. Hey wouldn't it really annoy everyone if she got married off to someone REALLY bad, like Bandit Keith or something?! WILD!! Heh heh heh...

Later

IM sorry i'm so late in reviewing and im sorry that I haven't logged in either..im bad at this..-__- oh well on with the review..

WEll I must say..this honestly..is my favourite chapter yet..it contains many themes and also it has my favourite layout..e.g sad and no hope opening and then like gets lighter during the story as u read along..but then what u did was make it so that near the end just when u think it's going 2 get all happy etc..those dreams happen..even i didnt expect that..and also i didnt think the dreams would be that..scary! 0_0 if i was one of those guys..no wonder I would want 2 find my loved one that quickly! That's enough to make anyone find them! freaky! But what i really want 2 know is..What's happening to ryou, marik, yugi and the rest of them? If the yami's and kaiba, duke r struggling that bad..then wehat is hapening to the others! Its not a nice thought actually..0_0 they must b saved soon! but then u made this chapter up by including rumour, which i found really funny..including the rabbit scene..but would it even b possible 4 malik and yami 2 hide behind a bush with their hair 0_0 but speaking of hair..poor yami..i swear u picked on him! u made him faint r passout in the snow and then u make his precious hair get caught in a tree. *sniggers* even though it was funny! Oh but i must say i liked one of ur ideas u did though..the one about malik going clothes shopping. Nice 2 c he brought them the outfits they wear during battle city etc..like it..but yes i agree Kaiba's coat is stupid.and also malik wouldnt be able 2 buy that in a cheap store so yeah..thank you 4 ditching that coat! Thats all i can say really..sorry if it's like.not that uch but overall i love the chapter..it's defently my favourite one..but now i shall use bakuras ring 2 tel me what 2 do next...*holds up ring and one of the pointers points* hmm..it's pointing 2 the pretty 'submit review' button..ok i shall do that..c ya

*+Pugi+*

Hey im gonna b honest here and say im not writing such a long review as normal due 2 the lac of brain power i have left in my head after writing far 2 many blogs on 2 many websites that seem 2 b getting no comments or feedback what so ever..so yeah ..dats enough of that but my brain is hurting as i type this so yeah..sorry if its not as long as the others..;_; well I'm still sticking by my guess of Pegasus as the person bugging them and I also have noticed that in each chapter you focus more on like one pairing or person and to make it fair you also involve other characters to make it eve e.g. for this chapter you have focused your attention more on marik/malik and i must say thats quite a good idea. As i know u ur fav pairing is ryou/bakura and that u have like let them go for this chapter i like that style ^-^ but I must say Mariks mum is a **! I want 2 kill her! how dare she say such a thing about her own son..oh well not everyone can except everyone as they r but thas what lifes all about. Oh but i must say how could u disrupt their lives like that?!?! how mean but hey it makes good reading ^-^ adn oh...i nearly cried when they were all torn apart like that! ;_; well dats all i can think of sayign at this moment. Sorry if it wasnt as long as usual but i like this chapter just as much ^-^ well keep up the good work

*+Yugi+*

Hermione: YAY! I really like this, I didn't review the last chapter because I was so eager to keep reading.
Nefertiri: My hikari's a book worm...so she does that all the time...
Hermione: Yea...Well, about last chapter. I really liked it, and don't feel weird about the whole Ryou's apperance. I'm not exactly one who can judge the poor thing because I have before had people think I was a boy...
Nefertiri: How people can say that I have no idea (my aibou looks like a girl doing a horrible job of crossdressing half the time..hehehe.)
Hermione: NEF! I don't, It's not my bloody fault they don't make anime shirts for girls! Any way, I was thrown off when I first saw Ryou but yea...any way, this chapter was good! I like the characterisation with the yamis and I'm curriouse as to Bakura's ability, but I suppose You'll explain that later...so I'm off to find that song Marik's listening to, the poor thing having to go to tharipy at such a young age!

Hermione: It reminds me of the manga...exept with a bit of a twist...interesting...The only thing that I'm lost to is the Council, I hope you explain them better in later chapters because I really don't get it.
Nefertiri: Yet again, my hikari is a bit of an idiot so she doesn't get a lot of things!
Hermione: Nefertiri! I'm not an idiot!
Nefertiri: ...yea you are...hehehe...keep writing this fic please!

i'm sorry, i'm sorry, i'm sorry, i'm sorry...i'm very sorry about not reviewing the last chapter..c im not good at this kinda thing..but well 2 make up i'll type a very long review? Will that sufice...0_0 ok i'm using posh kinda terms now!

Well how should we begin...er...cos I have a lot 2 say I'm like reviewing 2 chapters in one. Hmm how about I sperate it like this...

Bakura X Ryou- Aww you've actually made them sound like a sweet couple for once and not like the most common form of relationship for them whihc tends to be Bakura hurting Ryou, lets him bleed to death and then says the words I love you! HOW IN THE WORLD CAN ANYONE LOVE IF THEY DO THAT!?! OH WELL, but I like the idea of each of them having their own theme song and so sweet, Ryou is Bakuras Angel ^-^ how cute! but by what they did in chapter 5 r u sure Ryou is an angel, maybe he might still be becuase he probably took bakura to heaven with that tongue. And that is a sic thought #shudders# oh well but my favourite bit about this pairing had to be were Bakura says the real reason why he is called Change of Heart, and go Kura 4 actually being smart enough 2 get into Kaiba's system! SCORE! ^_~ but oh I just love the way you describe this pairing in genral, and I love the bit with the Nightmare before christmas and oh I so remember that opening and I agree with ryou, CLOWNS R SCARY! but bless them, they are so sweet together. Nice work on that piring Chen and well done for not actually making that pairing cliché, that's hard 2 find these days. So congrats on that!

#blows on throbbing fingers# whos next? ahh..#squels#

Yugi X Yami= AWW SO, SO, SO,SO SO, SO, SO, So CUTE! well u knew I was going 2 say that didn't u?! but oh Yami being all depressed and Yugi being is little sunshine, hence the song and nickname. Aww but such a cute nickname for him to have normally it would be, Little One or Aibou but you've made something complety different whihc I fnd adorable and oh...Yami being called a moon so cute! Is it because the moon reflects from the sun and basks in it's emense and warm glow? 0_0 ok ingnore the crap Pugi has just typed there! But oh Yugi cant do maths, nor can I but who can? But I like the way you have made Yugi actually grown up and not act like a kid and all innocent like. Nice!but oh I just love this couple so much! and Yugi playing match maker, nice, but y can't there be a yugi/yami scene..please! pretty please! #gets hit by rock# ok i'll shut up ...but maybe life for the little sunshine is going to get worse later, maybe a bit overcast..soz that was bad! Oh but I love the way you have done this pairing too, you have Yami still getting in touch with his emotions and Yugi playing match maker and my favourite scene has got to be the one with the millenium puzzle, aww bless them. They hugged and then they heard ecah other through their minds! so cute! oh well I better go on about another pairing now, for I bet you r bored of my ranting ow. Sorry! ^-^ Nice work once again though Chen! AND MY FINGERS R BLOODY HURTING! hehe..soz

Marik X Malik: AWW SO CUTE AS WELL! but i wanted to give marik such a big hug after reading the 4th chapter and he was all upset! Poor Marik! but maybe you should add a Shaman King line into this ...Marik = "Malik he is like roses, he has thorns!" but well dats a bit silly realy, I would thing Malik more as stinging nettles due to handled in the right way and you wont get hurt but if treated badly or too rough you get stung. Thats kinda like him right...?But oh the songs u used so sweet, but u know the one thing I am going 2 rant on about...#eats a strawberry# the strawberry incident. R they really a natrual viagra? #eyes strawberries# really? hmm..I know they make nasty stains, r good with cream during Wimbledon, and you can pick ur own?. hmm...maybe i shouldnt eat them from now on..but they r so nice..i cant resist! #eats a bowl full of them# nope..dont feel anything...apart from nuseau...oh well! but well at this moment the couple r ok..at the moment..u know this daisy's life is going 2 go bad sooner or later! but oh well. Go Chen! You gonna pluck Marik's petals! hehe.bad joke but oh well. I have nothing more 2 say really..hence my short review...

Well dats really all I can say apartf rom one thing that is buggering me..WHO IS THE PERSON THAT IS WATCHING AND TRYING TO LISTEN TO THEM? Is it Kaiba, but he wants Joey..and oh yeah I would comment on the Tristan and Duke paring but I dont know what 2 say..very well written and thanks 4 not describing the Kaiba and Joey scene! BUT ME GUESS ON THE BAD GUY IS PEGASUS! JUST BECAUSE I SAY SO! oh one more thing..u know chapter 5's title.Is it called Happy Times, becuase one all is calm and merry and then later trouble brews or it it because majority of them r sex high and bonking each others brains out? hmm..who knows..oh well soz about the short review and im sorry...for well not being good at reviewing on time. Oh well C ya next chapter and yeah..im kinda happy and worried at the mo..but oh well..its only cos of that bombing thing in London was outside my dads office ^-^' oh well..please put the next chapter up! I WEILL REVIEW U STILL HAVE ME READING UR STORY! EVEN IF THATS NOT GOOD I'LL STILL B HERE!
c ya
*+Yugi+*

WOW, WOW WOW WOW, I LOVE THAT SONG! I HAVEN'T HEARD IT FOR YEARS ( my parents have the album) AND ONCE I SAW THOSE WWORDS I REMEMBEREDIT! WHAT A BRILLANT SONG FOR MARIK TO HAVE! soz I'm gonna find the album now...ah ha there it is. Soz but that is a cool song. *slaps herself* You wanted a reveiw and the only thing I can talk about is the song..*slaps herself again* I'm such an idiot..yet at least this review is on time..^-^ Well once again teacher Yugi is ack in the house and for another marking of a story, but in my eyes..an exam. For it is my destiny to review this story and say how much I enjoy it, and review about it so seriously...hehee wonder if u can wrok out were that line came form. It's like made up but it's based on something you said.

First thing I would like to comment on is this..I WANT TO BEAT UP MALIK AND BAKURA! They were so mean to Ryou and Marik that they deserve a good beating! Poor things..0_0 whoa..reality check..I'm feeling sorry for Ryou and Marik *pinches herself* OWW! it's not a dream! Yugi has finally lost it! Oh well...but back onto the Yami subject here. Malik's character, well I think thats a good idea you had for him there being the one to be mean to Marik and the same with Bakura. Excellent work there Chen, but my favourite descriptionhad to be the one of Bakura and his eyes, wow that sounds totally wicked! and Duke smoking at 14..tut tut..oh well they do it all the time don't they. The bit that did make me laugh was the fact one u said Kaiba was smug, so true and that you also said why he had to go to school..hehe SUCKER!

Well I liked this chapter and I also liked the idea of the picture Ryou drew, sounds cool and Bakura trying to keep his image by saying..it's alright. hehe stupid tombrobber! but sadly my review is drawing to a close, but yet you're probably thinking..she has not mentioned Yugi or Yami..THATS WERE YOU ARE WRONG CHEN!! HEHEHE! I am now goign to show u how sick minded I am...

Here's a line from your chapter: “Guys, this is Yami Atemu and he lives down the road from me. We used to play together when we were little.” What do you think I thought when I read that line...and another thing..Yugi can't say when we used to be little, if you get what I mean..0_0 I JUST INSULTED YUGI! NO! *hugs Yugi* I'M SORRY! Oh well..I think you know what I meant by that line. So yeah this short review is coming to a close my friend. Overall I think you have done very well once again Chen and keep up the good work and so 'Just Keep Typing, Just Keep Typing' and keep up the good work. ^-^ Sorry about the short review. C ya

*+Yugi+*
Teachers Marks: 100%

first of I would like to appologise deeply for not reviewing this chapter before for no excuse can say how rude and mean that is. I am very sorry! Well even though this review is very late...(sorry!) I can still talk about it can't I, so here it is.

Wow Ryou and Marik have finally shown up! ^-^ and yes I must agree with everyone about the whole Ryou looks like a girl..IT'S THE HAIR! or maybe the way he acts e.g. vulnerabe which is sterotypical of a female character (0_0 I'm sounding like i know what I'm talking about) adn yeah also the width and shape of their waist and hips does not help either, but another thing I must agree on is do English people sound like that? but thats not the point. The point is the way u have interpreted Ryou is right on the dot, spot on really. It's quite rare and hard 2 find people who have actaully described characters, yet alone use a bit of their imagination to make them seem different. so so far in this exam u have got 50/100/..wait when was this an exam..0_0 OH WELL TEACHER YUGI WILL MARK THIS FOR YOU!

Another character you intoduced was Marik I believe (puts more marks on the test results sheet) and I just felt so sorry for him, with the history thing.dont know why but I did. But the bit that did make me laugh was the part when they were talking about North Street and they were saying were do you live..and it's like..5 and then ..oh..249. That bit made me laugh, but the bit that really did make me kinda understand the beginning of the story was about the whole thing of being excepted..like Ryou saying he wants to change and then like all of them understanding how the other feels and don't be mean to Yugi..well i would think that but it's true really, but already this story is becoming more gripping and interesting. See you may feel like no one likes it and oh it's not good but you shouldn't say such things. The use of description you use is top marks and then the way you have tried to make others and the readers understand the characters is better then other people do. So don't think that way, you still have us and hey kinda sounds like your story a bit...and like Lia said..we'll do some advertising for you but still this story is expertly writing my friend. So even though you may not get reviews or you feel the story is bad..doesn't matter for you still have some of us reading and reviewing you (even though our timing is bad) but hey like the MacDonalds advert..'I'm lovig it' and som me Lia and Mai will try our best 2 advertise 4 you. Just think of dory the fish..instead of just kep swimming. change it to 'just keep typing'.

Wekll thats all I can really think of to say, it wasb't really a lot but hey I ain't good at support and that kinda thing..but overall teacher Yugi gives you full marks onthis exam. You can do it girl! C ya

*+Yugi+*