This story has a good storyline to it, but I think that you need to build up to the climax more. Like, focus more on how the charactres are feeling. That's the only thing I really had a problem with. I love Harry Potter. It's great. If you wanna check out my HP story "The Last Battle" I'd really appreciate it. I'm in desparate need of reviews for that story. Anyway, keep going with this.