LMAO at the song. You gotta love Boyz Attack.

Well. Sadie's got to. Jude just loves it's singer. Lol. This song makes me laugh, cringe, and grin all in one. I swear I'm picturing the dance to it in my head right now. The arm in front of the body, moving across, held out. Very boy band. Haha. Then there's the fist pull down. Haha. Oh dear. I watch that show too much.

I love this story. I read it a while back, but I forgot that I read it, so I read it again and realized half way through that I'd read it before, lol. But I still love it. Well done.

This story made me cry so much. It was really terrific and realistic. I also love Jaylie stories more than any other type of Degrassi fanfiction. So far, this has been my favorite fanfiction every. As for a critique, one is not needed.

yeah i would have known the whole beginning of this story if i read this chapter, long summary lol

but yeah lol she's crazy for having sex to get coke lol kinda funny tho...its like gimme some ...o.O i'll do you

ok onto the next chapter. zane is a weird name lol ZORO!

yes,...and i'm exhausted from READING them lol jk

yeah they did seem longer

i predict it'll be a couple chapters before she stops doing coke since you have a chapter titled "breaking the habit" lol i'm gonna just make assumptions

but yeah i don't like emma at all lol her pov doesn't matter!

jay is okay, but sean of course, still my favorite. i think the family only rule at hospitals is gay.

i liked this chapter, damn i knew she'd OD or something, i liked her a lot at the beginning cuz she's the main character, but now i just like sean the best i guess lol

i pictured her rocking back and forth on the floor in her underwear and jay's t-shirt lmao

yeah i hope they put her in rehab or at least do something for her. i know she can't like die from the OD cuz she's the whole point of this story, so i'm not too nervous about that.

i like that song

i wanted them to do it, but i know that it woulda only happened cuz of problems with sean and emma.

i had a feeling jay would catch her with the coke in the bathroom and then take it that way.

it's about time that someone took away the frickin compass lol i still like sean cuz he's not a bad person at all and i feel bad for him now that he has to see them together. i don't think ellie and jay will last tho by the way things have been going. ellie is too messed up lol

this chapter was okay, seemed shorter than the others, idk why you keep marco in this story lol he's pointless now, well idk lol...

damn you interrupted ellie and jay by sean walking in, lol i liked his reaction tho

but he ruined the moment dammit

yeah idk i'm predicting that jay is not going to love her back or something strange like that. emma's a **. lol

ellie was stupid tho cuz she's messing around too. well they haven't screw...yet

I think you have a thing for semi colons haha comma's are better!

I don't know how I feel about Jay punching sean...lol jay's not my favorite character, but sean is still wrong for what he did.

ellie feels safe in EVERYONE's arms!! damn hoe lol jk

oh god i knew sean was gonna end up getting screwed over, eh w/e i don't even like emma in this story. lol she's blah.

idk why i still like sean! lol

jezus katy you're writing a damn ** story or something. i hate the word breasts. guys don't say breasts lol and i can't see sean saying that word at all lol

psh i woulda just wrote boob. or tit lmao

'i cupped her titter in my palm' hahaha

the coke thing you wrote about is reminding me of the trey incident, thank god that guy didn't do anything to ellie, i woulda hated your story haha

i liked the way the chapter ended.

again, really good title...applies very well obviously lol

i'm really not liking jay at the moment, or the ellie-jay couple idea unfortunately, and ew potheads, he's going to make her develop bad habits and she still won't be happy.

i'm mad at her now for kissing jay, i think she has no reason to be mad at sean (til i read the end of the chapter lol)

omg, i knew it was going to happen with emma cuz of how you changed the pov to sean right away

and i didn't know that emma was a simpson so i was confused before

I think instead of the party, they shoulda gone to emmas to catch her with sean during the act hah!

omg someone should kick her ** so she's not an alcoholic like her mom!!

yeah i had a feeling he would say someting about taking care of her and how she was turning into her mom a little bit.

i don't like jay so far, yuck..

hah, i'd laugh if ellie and jay had drunk sex or something cuz it's so dumb lol

lol that line jay said about the best nite of his life was funny

i think everything is cheating, especially kissing lol...like anything he wouldn't want emma to do with other people, he shouldn't do. jay is an ** lol

ugh ellie should really stick with sean, i liked that couple so far. and i really don't think ellie and jay are a good match, idk y, maybe it'd be different if i knew more about the show and stuff.*shrug*

about the zane thing, i don't think you ever mentioned that she already had a name for the baby

(btw, another typo in the bigger paragraph in ellie's pov)
"be more important *then* (than?) your own child that died"

i liked the poem or song that you put in this chapter...idk who wrote it or if it's a song or anything cuz i didn't look, but i like it, if it's not something you wrote, i think you should write your own poems to put in here, it'd be good.

i knew she was gonna end up cutting herself again cuz sean the jackass just left the damn compass layin around for her to use again! make me so mad!! lol and i knew she'd end up overdoing it when she did.

but good chapter, random italicized line at the end lol, does that refer to ellie? cuz i don't see it relating to sean obviously lol...

i definitely like the words to that song, i'd have to hear it tho cuz i've never like bon jovi that much

ok, so why doesn't sean just throw the damn compass away or something instead of leaving it on the floor for her to pick up and eventually use again!

are my review too long or too short?

In this story, i completely hate marco lol i think he's an ** character sorta. idk he reminds me of one of those completely self-centered gay people that think they're more important than everyone else lol, i'll have to read a different story about him so i don't hate him anymore.

and i think he's ugly. lol

the flashback to where she wanted a picture of "zane" was really sad, but i don't think it was weird to want one, i probably would too.

umm...who's spike...?

well, i haven't yet decided wwhether or not i like the pov change...well i like flashbacks but not pov changes as much cuz ellie's is a lot better than seans i think so far...

at first i thought she was gonna go have an abortion but then i remembered she's your favorite so you wouldn't do that...also, i remembered that on the show someone else had an abortion..like emma or paige or somebody...probably emma cuz of the manny's opinion thingy lol idk i just remember you mentioning it to me

when i was reading this chapter, as soon as i saw the title, i got the song stuck in my head!

the beginning of seans pov, it was kinda weird, like poem or journalish but then the mood randomly changes after the divider.

idk, it was kinda jumpy and confused me a bit lol, i'm too used to ellie's pov

you have a typo lol just to let you know, 2nd paragraph after the divider "What's even more *mess*(ed?) up is that I wish it were mine"

i think my fav sentence is "she was about to burst open any minute, but still looked hot" lmao

i liked the spitting flames comment too

i think the gayest line tho was "but first, i want revenge!!" lol

the stealing the car thing was a funny idea

i knew tho as soon as she thought of stealing marco's car, that something was going to happen, an accident or whatever that would hurt her stomach and kill the baby so i started getting mad at you hahaha

i love that song, did you put it in there just cause you liked it at the time?

ugh, giving birth to a dead baby is like the worst thing ever, your story is making me feel pukey lol