Reviews for For the Greater Good

Reviews For: For the Greater Good

AngelicRose31 2005-06-16 ch 6,	abuseVery Cool Story! I hope you update soon! I plan to write an Angel fic myself!
gidgetgirl 2005-06-15 ch 6, anon.	abuseYou write original characters very well, and your writing itself is a joy to read. My only complaint is that your canon characters, while not out of character, aren't in character at all. There's nothing about Wesley that's Wesley-ish, nothing about Fred that's Fred-ish, and Lindsey, in my opinion, is written even more out of character than the others. You might concentrate on dialogue for a while: Wesley's British accent and tendency towards "Oh dear" and murmuring musings to himself; Fred's babbling tendencies and slight bit of southern bounciness. Fred's a bit wishy washy; Wesley isn't all that sure of himself either. Lindsey is sarcastic, very sarcastic, and would never bother himself to pick up two children on the side of the road and take them cross country- that's called kidnapping! It's a good story- just really work on your dialogue, and maybe try to get inside the heads of the canon characters a little bit more... good luck!
Freezyboncoolipants 2005-06-15 ch 6,	abuseThat seems a weird place to finish it, but it was still cool. I think it's a bit soon for Fred to be thinking she's pregnant though, like, just after one week, but I guess that's not really important. lol. Liv and Dominic are so cute! Can't wait for the sequel!
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 6,	abuseJust when you think it's safe to go back into the water. . .oops! that's Jaws! Poor Wes & Fred! And God knows what's happening to poor little Dom. I hope he gets off the island. . .or gets the ring back to Mt. Doom. . .or gets away from Darth! I really enjoyed this story, and I'm looking forward to the sequel. BTW do you know I think Fred & Lindsey are brother & sister, separated when she was very young by the Child Welfare people because of the family's poverty?
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 5,	abuseI think the fact that the kids ran to him will make Wes, Fred, & Angel trust Lindsey. Naturally Angel, being Angel, would hit Lindsey first & ask questions later. And people wonder why I dislike Angel! Anyway, I'm glad Fred & Wes are together with the kids again.
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 4,	abuseI'm surprised they didn't just kill Lindsey, but, of course, I'm glad. That was pretty stupid of them. So the kids' powers are starting to develop well. I'm glad Fred & Wes had a few moments of happiness. A little nooky from Nookyfiction!
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 3,	abuseI really like a "good Lindsey" story, so it's nice to see him out to help the good guys. If he knew who the kids were, he'd be breaking every speed record to get to L.A. So Dom has power, too! I'm sure this evil Salazar will want both of them. BTW Lindsey isn't tall; remember Angel called him a "tiny Texan." But he could look tall to the kids.
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 2,	abuseSo they have powers? What kind? I know Fred & Wes are super intelligent, but I'm wondering where the powers came from. They're certainly brave. The orphanage doesn't seem like such a bad place, and Amy seems to be a very nice person, even though she does underestimate the kids.
Imzadi 2005-06-15 ch 1,	abuseLots of thoughts on this chapter. I love the name Olivia. Does Dominic have large hairy feet &/or a love for rock & roll? Fred & Wes must be rich to have a mansion! And why does "he" want the babies dead? One would think it was their parents "he" wanted dead. I'm intrigued.
Lily DeSilva 2005-06-14 ch 6,	abuseVery nice...Great job...I really like it. Lily

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