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| michelaski 2005-10-07 ch 17,  | abuseAW...so cute! Love the ending! Great job on the entire story. Loved it! I dunno what else to say right now...I'm kinda tired...so sorry...but I'll say it again, AWESOME ending! Later! |
| pinkforensics 2005-10-07 ch 17, | abuseThis chapter, within it's own simplicity, really caught me. You managed to make it symbolistic whilst wrapping up the story. And although it was cute, it didn't really do much justice to the ending of it. Again, I suggest you to get a beta reader. Overall, I think you did a good job. |
| pinkforensics 2005-10-07 ch 14, | abuseAh! It's taken me such a long while to actually read this, but here I am! First, I suggest you get a beta reader, only because I noticed many grammatical errors in the character's dialogue. Another thing you need to watch, are your '...' because you seem to put them everywhere. Off to the next chapter.. |
| michelaski 2005-09-05 ch 16, | abuseCute ending...very nice job on it...can't wait for your next update...later! |
| michelaski 2005-08-29 ch 15, | abuseAw...so cute...very nice chapters, loved them both! Looking forward to your next update. Later! Michelaski |
| crimebuff 2005-08-28 ch 13, | abuseOh my gosh! AH!! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! I'm freaking out! I hope everyone is going to be okay! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE |
| michelaski 2005-08-28 ch 13, | abuseTalk about intense...had me at the edge of my seat...still am actually...can't wait for the next chapter! Watch out Nicky! Later! |
| michelaski 2005-08-27 ch 11, | abuseHook, line and sinker indeed. Very good chapter and looking forward to yer next update. Later! |
| pinkforensics 2005-08-27 ch 11, | abuseIf Mr. Klein works with knives, then he would be a 'chef' not a 'chief'. Although this chapter was longer, there wasn't a lot of action. Wow, they got a DNA match. And yes, I know every chapter of every story can't be action-packed (I'm not good at that, myself). This chapter was good. I'm still wondering where you're going to take this. |
| michelaski 2005-08-25 ch 10, | abuseVery cute ending...can't wait for yer next update! And you shouldn't leave the story there yet...there's room for more action! At least, that's the impression that I get, anyway, Later! Michelaski |
| pinkforensics 2005-08-25 ch 10, | abusePlease don't leave it there. You have plenty of room to expand this story and give us more. |
| pinkforensics 2005-08-24 ch 9, | abuse"...oh and thanks for saving me from Hodges.” :lol: Good 'ol Hodges doing what he does best -- anoying the heck outta everyone. This chapter was slightly less-paced than the others. Some grammatical and spelling errors. I suggest possibly getting a beta reader or a program to over-look your work. Nonetheless, I'm curious to find out what's going to happen next with this story. |
| michelaski 2005-08-24 ch 8, | abuseGreat chapter, I liked the way Warrick comforted Ash...very best friend-ish. Can't wait for yer next update! Later! |
| pinkforensics 2005-08-24 ch 8, | abuseHer reaction to the scene was pretty strong, suggesting that her past is now catching up to her. And BTW, the correct spelling is "luminol", not "luminal". Anyway, I'm off to read the next chapter! |
| HyperSquishy 2005-08-17 ch 7, | abusePoor Warrick. I hope he can get over her. |