 Mustard Yellow Sunshine 2005-06-17 . chapter 1Very nice! Short and random, yes, but so cute! I quite liked this. I thought it was well written, overall, though I must admit, one phrase you used sounded kind of off. "Say that advice" doesn't sound quite right. I think it would read better if it were "give that advice" rather than "say that advice".
Anyway... I don't mean to nit pick. ^_^" Just thought I'd mention it. |