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| Deilf Amhran 2005-10-24 ch 4,  | abuseI hope Jonathan Worthy isn't some Raoul parallel..because I like Raoul (and Erik of course). This is unique. Still unsure where this is going though I'm pretty sure that's a good thing in writing. |
| Deilf Amhran 2005-10-24 ch 3, | abuseWould a girl really be allowed to join a..a..this ship/crew? I was wondering if the soical beliefs of the time would prevent men from even considering the idea of a female "risking" herself like that. I don't know since I'm not a 19th century history expert. I'm assuming the story takes place in about the same time as the Phantom (1880/1881)... |
| Deilf Amhran 2005-10-24 ch 2, | abuseDefinitely want to see where this is going. |
| KitArchivist 2005-08-14 ch 4, | abuse“This salty air! That’s why!” he replied, testily. “It’s just no good for my hair!” *dies laughing* wow. that was awesome. I like what you've written so far! |
| Kainaku Hotaru 2005-08-14 ch 4, | abuseWooh! Pirate!Erik! :D Can't wait for the next installment. Oh, and very nice fop, with Mr. Worthy. XD He made me giggle with his hair dilemma. |
| Mithril2014 2005-08-13 ch 4, | abuseWhat a delightful chapter! I loved the image at the beginning...tall, thoughtful man, weathered and weary...in the eyes and face...and methinks the soul as well. I want to know his thoughts...know what has caused him to withdraw from the world. ::sighs over the hat!:: What a contrast the next scene was. Mr. Worthy is priceless! I could picture his swinging bob of hair...being damaged and dried by the salt air! The burdens that he carries, can all be resolved with a good moisturizing shampoo! I suspect Mr. Worthy will face some deeper trials, though, in the future. A woman who is marrying for position and money, has a heart left vulnerable to passion from another. And poor Jenn! The adventure hasn't panned out yet...she finds herself doing mundane jobs with a "bunch of boring sailors on a trading expedition"! Jenn despairs of a pirate captain wanting to capture her ship...she doesn't even want to be there! Oh, Jenn...just you wait! Great job! I'm so intrigued! |
| CanaceErinn 2005-08-13 ch 4, | abuseGreat chapter- I picture Jonathan swirling his hair around very easily('course it helped us reading it out loud last night, hm?), and the rest as well. I am really sorry I can't beta anymore, but I intend to keep up with this-am anticipating more good 'foppy' moments. |
| Eppie 2005-08-12 ch 4, anon. | abuseHehehe... the whole bit with the hair was absolutely priceless. Squee! |
| Eppie 2005-08-12 ch 4, anon. | abuseHehehe... the whole bit with the hair was absolutely priceless. Squee! |
| Paige Mac 2005-08-12 ch 4, | abuseFwa Becky! I told you my reveiws make authors cry with despair, but here it goes- I like it! You have a wonderful gift for setting hooks, and I'm just dying to know what happens next! |
| Mongie 2005-08-12 ch 4, | abuseGood job Ms. Numbers. I was cracking up when he started talking about his hair. I can just picture it. coughfopcough Can't wait for the next chapter. RAA for Pirate!Erik. -Monj |
| hikari-no-tsubasa 2005-08-12 ch 4, | abuseI actually had not read this story before today... *hides head in shame* I actually didn't realise that it had been posted already, but that is my own fault and beside the point... The point IS, I just read all four chapters that you have posted and I love what you have so far! Mr. Worthy is absolutely hilarious... sensitive hair? LOL Wonderfully foppy! But most important of all, and maybe I've said this before, but your writing style flows very naturally, the story is easy to read and pulls the reader in! Well, at least when the reader is me. I put you on my Author Alert list so I'll definitely be back to read more! |
| Mithril2014 2005-07-13 ch 3, | abuseThe adventure begins! Nicely done, Jenny's backstory. I like it that it wasn't fraught with danger and an evil aunt, but centered around a young lady...following her dreams. I'm so interested in where her desires will lead her. And rescued...by a man with an artificial face...hm...he briefly makes his appearance, and then vanishes. I'm sure we'll be seeing him again soon! Nice details...you've done your homework and it shows. Makes the story flow well and lends credibility. Looking forward to following this story. |
| Mongie 2005-07-13 ch 3, | abuse*eyes Becky* *glomps her...sneakily* Things are shaping up to be quite interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter, and to find out more about the Peacock. |
| Eppie 2005-07-12 ch 3, anon. | abuseI'm still very intrigued... I love your main character's voice, it's very clear... Can't wait for more! (Did I mention I'm terrible at reviews?) Heh, the escape into the prickly bushes was cute. And I can't wait for them to be out at sea! :D -Eppie, your long lost sister. ;) |