hey update soon.

awsome chapter and good ending! kove the story grat job! im kinda sad its over but atleast this chapter didnt make me cry my eyes out like ur last one...lol ...ill look forward to ur other stories someday

aw, Mel! that was great you did a great job with this story, I'm so proud

That was an awesome way to end it, just kind of a review of everything and her looking back on how hard it had been without him. It was very reflective and just I really enjoyed it. Great job, I loved this story, keep writing!

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED IT!!

THIS WAS SUCH A GREAT FIC!!--VERY BITTERSWEET , BUT VERY AWESOME!!

I MEAN, OF COURSE I WISH LUCAS WAS STILL AROUND TO BE WITH PEYTON & HIS KIDS...AND HIS FRIENDS.

BUT U TOOK TEH DIFFERENT ROUTE WHERE TEHY COULDN'T HAVE THAT HAPPY ENDING...IT WAS HAPPY BECAUSE PEYTON HAD THINGS SHE WANTED WITH HIM. SHE JUST COULDN'T PHYSICALLY HAVE HIM B/C HE WAS GONE.

U HANDLED IT WELL...AND U WROTE THIS FIC EXTREMELY WELL.

AND I LOVED LEYTON, JALEY & BRATHAN...I THINK U WRITE THEM WELL.

SO I'D LOVE TO SEE MROE FICS WITH THEM FROM YOU!! ;) (LOL)

FANTASTIC JOB!!

Aw Tottyy! :_(
That was so sad hun! Im sorry I havent reviewed for the last couple of chapters! I only just caught up with it! but you did a fantastic job with this story hun, just like I knew you would! truly brilliant... You're a fantastic writer x

"I’m dieing Peyt, I can feel it. And I probably don’t have long left, I’d say about fifteen minutes. "

That statement made me laugh and pulled me out of the story. People who ar dying, especially from a degenerative desease don't know that they'll be dead in fifteen minutes. If they're that close, they're usually struggling to stay alive, to breathe, to move. This just didn't feel right. It felt like you wanted to be dramatic but didn't know how so you had to have the character announce his immanent death. It just doesn't work very well, though, because it rushes the storyline along and pulls you into a place where instead of crying because the character was dying, you're laughing because the statement was funny.

In general I think the story goes a little too fast. There's not too much detail to give us a sense of the characters' feelings. They have to just be announced so you can move one to the next point of drama. It's not badly written, and you mostly spell things correctly, but the pace if off, and we're not getting enough detail to pull us into the story and get us emotionally attached.

If you ever redo this story, that would be the major thing to work on, the pace and the detail.

Otherwise, it's not a bad concept, and I think you mostly write really well.

One little thing that has been seriously bothing me, and I can't believe no one else mentioned, though. "Dieing" is not a word. The word is "Dying". It's Death, Die, Dying.

MEL! great update...hee update again sooN!

from Malaysia- Christine :P

Wow, what a sad chapter, it really sucked to see him go. I'm glad his last words were to Peyton and that they all got a chance to review their times with him. I also like the friendship with Haley and Peyton at the end, it was a really good moment. Great job, update asap!

Dude, you suck you got me crying damn it! It was great! update soon sweetie *hugss*

I loved it. Update soon

aww..im so crying..tears are forming...im sad that my baby died!

aww..you got a tear from me..its so sad that she is pregnat and Lucas is dieing now! And the sex scene was a bit detailed but I still read it.

funny that Peyton thinks lucas might die...good analogy

Your mean for making Lucas such a jerk...i dont think he'd do all that