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| Jade of Purple 2007-01-10 ch 21,  | abuseThat was a really, really, really good story. I was practically in tears for half of it. |
| twin*muse 2006-02-01 ch 21, | abuseThis is amazing Faith. You captured Irina so well. It's perfect. It's so breath taking sad too. God I wish someone somewhere could push a button and make Irina Derevko all better again. I love this piece. Love the spymom ~Nicole of twin*muse |
| Queerquail 2005-12-19 ch 21, anon. | abuseI really like this. There are few stories out there that get into Irina's mind like this one, and I quite like the style. The summary could be a bit better, write a more interesting one and more people will be hooked into reading this. I spot some spelling mistakes, but I think you just need to be more careful. Good job! |
| HottDarkPrincess 2005-11-27 ch 21, | abuseooh i can't wait to read what else you have. I hope you add them soon. The story was really good. Your a really good writer. Keep up the good work. Lyndsay |
| HottDarkPrincess 2005-11-21 ch 15, | abusewow this is really good! I can't wait to reac the rest but now I've got to go to bed (parents forcing me). So yeah, um...bye. Lyndsay |
| intriKate 2005-11-17 ch 1, | abuseYou have a few problems with your story, most of them in your writing style: -Your writing sounds too much like spoken narrative, and not formal enough. If you're writing a story it ought to sound more like a published book than how you would speak. -When writing the names of languages, like Russian and American, capitalize the first letter. -Use a spell checker; your spelling, while not as atrocious as some I've seen, needs quite a bit of improvement. -Your summary has misspelled words, bad grammar, and is not effective portraying the story as something anyone would want to read. Correct it so that it is compelling and interesting. That said, your first chapter has a nice flow to it and I can see that there is a writer somewhere inside you. But learning how to write properly will do wonders to release that writer. Good luck and work hard! |
| spygirl4747 2005-08-22 ch 10, | abusegreat! The last sentence was so sad!! Thanks for updating so many times in 1 day! |
| Kea 2005-07-23 ch 5, anon. | abuseWow. Keep it up. |
| spygirl4747 2005-07-12 ch 4, | abuseGreat chapter! I love this story! |
| Verity Kindle 2005-07-12 ch 4, anon. | abuseHehe, I think I see some serious soul-wrenching angst on the horizon. This chapter is well-written, but it doesn't flow quite as well as chapters 1 and 2. Just a thought. |
| JuliaAtHeart 2005-07-08 ch 3, | abuseWow, this is a great story! Keep going with it, I love the way you are developing Laura/Irinas charecter really well! |
| spygirl4747 2005-07-07 ch 3, | abuseGreat job! |
| spygirl4747 2005-07-04 ch 2, | abusegreat job!! |
| twin*muse 2005-06-28 ch 1, | abuseI doesn't suck! I love it...really good piece getting into Irina's head. Great job Colly E. of twin*muse |
| spygirl4747 2005-06-28 ch 1, | abusegreat job! |