Wow, that was definitely a very exciting fanfiction! You´ve got a great and special writing style and the plot was so fascinating, you´ve got some very very good ideas there. And I especially liked the last chapter, it´s great to use the same scene as in the first, but now we know what´s really going on... Yohji the vampire that is feeding from Aya. (Okay, that way it sounds much simplier than it really is... my English sucks :(...) But for me this can´t be the end... so I´ll hope you write a sequel^^ (or maybe you´ve already written a sequel, need to check that *drop*).
The only thing one could critisize is the use of tenses... you switch them sometimes, don´t you? And I don´t understand the reason for that in some cases... but okay, that´s not that important^^
Anyways, I really enjoyed your fanfiction!
Bye,
Layla

I really liked this story. Your humor is just hilarious! Thank you for writing this!

Gah!
I need to know if Aya and the real Yohji defeat the vampire!

Barbara

Citation: 'Koshchei or Kashchei, usually called "the deathless" in fairy tales and byliny, plays the role of grasping guardian of treasure hostile to the hero. So does the serpent or dragon, and they often interchange roles in parallel versions of tales.

Although Koshchei is mentioned in the preface of Ruslan and Ludmila, it is Chernomor who takes his part in the poem, and Naina, who significantly adopts a serpent's guise and seconds him in defending the treasures, for example Ludmila and the Beard. But Koshchei is a far more remote. In the tale of the Princess Frog, Ivan must find the island of Buyan, and in order to break Koshchei's spell, he must dig up an iron casket from under a green oak tree, wherein a hare, in which a duck, wherein an egg on the point of a needle. If this egg be squeezed, the ogre will feel terrible agony; if squashed, it will be his death.'

Russian, definitely. Scythian and Sarmatian origin. Baba Yaga,the old hag, getting some treatment too at this wonderful site.

Well, I can empathise with poor Yohji, and Aya IS mean. This 'little red' thing is brilliant, and Yohji turning all bad-**... well. Sexual frustration and/or confusion, compounded by a full moon and odd appetites for red stuff is a powerful thing, I suppose. Still have the niggling about Aya's fixation with 'orange'. But then, he's made of fixations, right. This is so funny.

Sorry to hear you had so much trouble with your electronics, they're only nice when they work or if you happen to be Omi/Nagi or smiliarly technophile.

I enjoy your writing, it's light and darkly funny (Makes sense? Whatever, I'm feeling depressed and silly tonight, along with my dear sake [pats sake bottle].) Looking forward to your Schwarz project - will you post it here too?

Anyway, enough babble (ah, and sympathy with inner voices trying to manifest themselves somehow, how frustrating...).

Finally managed to mark your story up as an alert, and how to activate alerts on my account... did I mention technophobia? Hmph. Yohji must get his act together. Aya needs to get laid. Ken and Omi... well, better not going there.

Hope to read more soon.

Cheers
LH

Somehow, its disturbing enough, that by being a Vampire would make some sense... and no sense at all in such a situation. Lol. so its a vampire, bent on having Aya, in Yohji's body, when Aya is aimlessly muttering about being 'little red riding hood'? Cute! ^_^; Sorry, that idea of him responding with that is just... i can't even put the pure amusement into words! So maybe the questions shall be ansewred, and maybe, you'll be an evil author and NOT inform the loving reviews as to what the whole point in the story is. I've been known for that myself... hmm... delicious flames tha I had recieved for it too... Keep up the good work! I await the nxt chapter!

The stroy is heating up! And suddenly it took on a more darker tone than before, with the sipits of humor amungst the insanity. Though, I would like to figure out more about this 'Night' creature inhabiting Yohji's body. And whats with this fasination with Aya/Ran? ^^; Seriuosly! He's pretty and all but meh. ^^ Keep up the wonderful work!

And my addiction for this story keeps growing. You are an amazing writer who managed to sculpt all the boys so perfectly into character. The mixture of humor and drama/mystery you used was well balanced and, all in all, this story is turning out positively wonderful. Bravo! Well done I must say. Please, write whenever you have the opportunity and I will be waiting to see what you have planned next. So until next time...

VL

Interesting and twisted, in many different ways. I like the subtle takes and weird plot twists, and the way things fall into place. I would write a more lengthy review, but I'm being lazy. keep up the wonderful work, I would enjoy seeing more!

Hello, Butler,

This is so funny, it is hilarious. Even got my dead-straight partner to smile! I like the easy dialogues and in particular Yohji's self-doubting insights. The light take on the whole story line, free of angst and a tongue-in-cheek, is something I find difficult to write, therefore I admire you for doing this in such a good way. Well done for dragging them out of their gloomy corner (where they firmly reside in my stories, I'm afraid) into this jolly romp.

Cheers
LoveyouHateyou

great...so IS youji killing those people?

*laughs* I like that! It's brilliant! Especially “Hold on… you can actually speak in complete sentences?” Love it! ♪Yohji's gone insane, Yohji's gone insane...♪