This poem makes me think about the time he died on Namek and when he killed himself in the Buu saga

I think this was pretty good...short, but good. I think my vote is for the Buu saga, because he DOES die there...and in the poem he DOES say goodbye...

Oh please do more with this. It's wonderful. And go with the Buu timeline. This is just too good to leave alone.

Nice, sharp peice. ::claps respectfully:: And did I read that you think your poems suck?

Wow! I loved that poem. _ If you do use this as a beginning to a fic, I think possible the Mirai timeline would be best, because I see it that way. It's very beautiful. Nice job!

Oh...another great poem. I wish I could write poetry like this. "I found forgiveness in her eyes/I found salvation in his". I found that line to be VERY powerful for some reason. So, you wanted my input? I think it would work best from the Mirai Timeline simply because well...it's never been done before...or at least not to my knowledge. O_o Besides, I would really like to see the Mirai Timeline from Vegeta's POV. I think it would work really well. I was actually thinking of doing one but...heh...time isn't on my side here. Anyway, the choice is your's. Much love and take care. Till next time... -

Its beautiful as it is. I dont want to spoil the Buu saga for you, but lets just say Vegeta makes a great sacrifice...

Maybe in the sayin-jin sage or In the middle of the Chibi-saga and the sayin-saga.

How much vegeta suffred while being a teenager

This poem certianly express Vegeta's thoughts and for a second part of the timeline try when he hear's of the destruction of his own world.

Vegeta has gone to hell 3 times. Once during the Frieza saga, once during the Buu saga, and once in Mirai Trunks timeline. It was cool though.

I don't usually read poems, but i love veggie. that was so sweet! veggie loves his family and i think he really proved it when maria trunks died and he went nuts. but, i feel your poem seems more like vegeta after he self destructs on buu. He wasn't out for vengence there, just to protect those he loved.

cool!

no! this is a very good peom. you don't need to change it. I like the way it is.

I'm for the Buu saga timeline! btw, nice poem ;-)

the poem is cool, you should go with Trunks-chan. (sorry Veggie, I still love you!)