I like it but the part when jack tells syd how he feels should be a little more dramatic you know. They should have looked into each others eyes or something.

OMG OMG OMG
Tell me you are so not talking about Sky and Z.

WHAT SHE SAID. WE NEED MORE JACK/SYD

So, so very cute!

Awesome. Sky/Z, Jack/Syd, very poignant. Loved it.

really good

nice

You might have some talent for writing, I really can't tell under all these tiny chapters which never go beyond romance and babies. Your grammar and spelling are good, which is refreshing, and this one at least was quite emotional and expressive.

Why don't you try doing an actual story instead of these ficlets that look like they took five minutes to write? You know, a story, one of those things with a plot and conflicts and characters who act like the people we saw on the TV show.

I like this, any jack/syd fic is great to me

Excellent story. Please write soon.