Not bad! It's different from the usual RitzXMarche. I didn't think that she and Llednar would make quite a cute couple too. Thinking of writing more? Please do!

So... GREAT.

Llendar will now NEVER be shipped with anybody that is not Ritz as long as I write him.

(This most likely means that he will not get much shipping action at all, since I love MR/RM (it's a palindrome!) even more, but still.)

Very good. I hope that you're still in the fandom.

That was delectably yummy. (I have a weird habit of associating reading material with food. XD) I do so loved the dialogue in this. Simply divine. ^_^

1. You don't suck, I do. Just try to find anything I've written anywhere. find anything?
2. the Llednar/Ritz thing is kind of obvious, i didn't even have to look.

keep up the good work!

teh story is goos so far look forward to further chapters

Wow, this is really creative. Not bad at all. What I would like to see is a continuation of this!

Kishazi's right, kupo!We do need more pairings than the same 'ol ones, kupo... I think that this story is great and has a very interesting pairing, kupo.

Nice one... btw i thought llednar died? Please explain!!

*blinks* I did like it. Llednar and Ritz rock.

aw, I don't think you suck... ^_^

I like this pairing! We need more 'weird' pairings out there instead of same-old-same-olds!

Continue!

Yaay Kupo!! More Llednar stories!! Go you!

Not bad, not bad. The Llednar/Ritz is indeed rather hard to spot, kupo.

Sorry that this "me" douchebag is...saying things you just don't say to a female, kupo...I don't know him. Mako-Streak says that if she did know him, he'd be imprisoned under her bed at night, serving her French Vanilla Tea and biscuits in the morning, and polishing her sneakers, kupo.

But still...good job, kupo.

Yippee! Finally something else about Llednar! Ya know, the guy looks disturbingly a lot like Marshmellow Boy.

Found with an arrow in his crotch for messing with a Sniper? That's brilliant!

Can i use that idea in my story?

seeya!

Llednar fucking died, you stupid cunt

Aw... that's adorable ^_^

Honestly, though, you're much too hard on your own prose... sign of a good author, actually. Keep 'em coming. I'll add ya to my alert list so that I can see what else you come up with... I like your writing style. Much easier to read than most of the submissions.