WOW! Deep!!1 I liked that a lot!! It was really well written! YOur story flowed together very smoothly. There's nothing that I can think of that you could possibly add to make this story any better than it is. I couldn't tell who was who, but that doesn't matter, you didn't really leave much clues for that, it could have been any one of them and that's what I like about your peice, it's not so sickeningly simple that you want to die, but it's nmot so complex that the expression on your face would be akin to this O_O. I like it alot!

Wowie, it was um...wow...can't say. It's just interesting yet confusing because who is 'I' and who is 'You'? I am so confused...
Ah well, still, I think you have good writing potential. Write more. Definitely.