|Reviews for His Betrayers' Daughter|
| AidoRockz 11/18/10 . chapter 21
I really like this story and there is few of them, please continue
| crusades 11/8/10 . chapter 1
This was a bit different.
I don't totally understand why she is telling her friends her dreams. I know I tell my friends my dreams sometimes, but when they are so... haunting. Maybe she would tell them, but they seemed like they half expected it, like it was nothing, although it was being her so much pain.
This was good, no doubt, but I just wondered about that.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 8
Now Tif is gone. Uh oh, what's she going to do now?
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 7
Does "Catch up" entitle that something bad is going to happen? I hope not. I like how Mary is with Dracula.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 6
Wow. I didn't expect Dracula to be so mean. It was kind of refreshing to see someone capture a different essence of him. Good job.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 5
I like the transformation part. Great job with this chapter! You have me caught in the story. Can't stop reading now.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 4
I liked this chapter, and I have some Constructive criticism. I think that a little more detail on the surroundings and what the characters are feeling could really help reveal to the reader's about the character. I think, if you described Morgan's fear more and went into depth on what aspects of the man feared her the most, the audience would make a better connection. This is one thing that my Beta said to me when I write, So I thought I could pass it on.
I think your story is wonderful, and I hope that I didn't offend you in any way, I don't mean to.
Keep up the good work.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 3
Why is she so scared of him, and why has she been hiding? I must read to find out more. Great job.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 2
I liked this chapter. I thought that it was a little on the short side, but I like how it was a surprise to her friends and I am going to keep reading to find out what is going to happen.
| Erikslittleangel13 11/17/08 . chapter 1
I think this first chapter was a good start to what I can tell is going to be a very good story. I like the plot and mysteriousness of it all.
Good job. Going to go and read the rest now.
| leah day 5/9/07 . chapter 17
I loved the latest chappie, but you really need to watch your grammer.
| Tammy Lorance 5/3/06 . chapter 6
This was very good. You have a talent. I can't wait to find time to read more. Has your dad seen this? I am not sure he is much of a reader, but I know he would enjoy this. He is so proud of you. I need you to email a copy of your poem to me. I was hoping to see it again here. Its the poem on peer pressure. Gotta Run.
| poor unhappy o.g 2/21/06 . chapter 12
skip to the next damn chapter!
| Guinn Pern 1/15/06 . chapter 11
hehe, very funny
| Alteng 1/15/06 . chapter 11
Feri is funny, and I got a good laugh out of the line :
"HE'S YOUR FATHER! He is like my idol that I look up to when I write my stories!"
I sounds like something I would write. I have new respect for Feri. What can I say. I like the dizzy ones.