I think I already reviewed this... But one ore time won't hurt; Beautiful. A masterpiece. Pat yourself on the back, because I'm afraid I'm not worthy of doing it for you.

I just wanted to tell you what a great story this is even if it will never be finished, some of my fav. stories will never be finished and this is at the top

Too much fanon seriously hurt this.

Ryoga, Akane, Nabiki, hell the whole cast as show here doesn't exist in the manga. Because of that, this fails as fanfiction.

As a story, however, this is interesting and that is it's only saving grace.

Very well done. Thank you.

nice

I like it.

please update this sory and keep it alive it is very good

i was thinking you could write a back story how ranma got the way he is and maybe finnish this story? just a thought .

keep up the god wrighting. thank alot

This story does well in the wrap up of several characters and 'clearing the slate' so to speak. The way most of the characters abandon Ranma in his lost state reflect their personalities well. Many of them are fairly self absorbed. Kasumi was a likely candidate to stay in touch and including Nabiki by using a plot device to alter her character was nice as well. Though the story ends on a hopefull note, it's bittersweet quality adds a lot to it. It also leaves it open for further continuation which would be well recieved.

This ssounds like a really cool story. I can't wait till you write more. I always thuoght Nabiki and Ranma made the cutest couple.( Besides Ranma and Kasumi ^_^) Anyway update real soon. (PLEASE?!)

There is no way I could continue this, but yet, I need resolution. I might give it a whirl, but don't...expect anything right now.

Very nice one-shot. Keep up the good work.

Best,
~JohnnyG

Interesting start. Has tremendous potential, but, ya know, "patintyal" ain't worth spit if it's not developed. No fair to ask someone else to finish your idea, but still want control as a beta reader. Keep it or give it away, no strings attached. You should make up your mind to finish this story. It's those who finish well who are remembered. Lots of people start and don't finish and are forgotten.

Now:
Nice idea for extending the family of the NWC. It takes Nabiki somewhat out of character, unless she has an ulterior motive. I have to agree with Yarrow that the ending, where Nabiki reveals what she's done is "off" somehow. Fix the "off" part. Work with it 'til Nabiki's reason for her action is more believable from your jumping off point. Ranma's "deposit" seems OOC too. Needs a better reason IMO for the "deposit."

"Rebirth" shows where you want to take the story, but don't seem to have the gas to go there. Come on man, get a sugar or caffine high, or whatever stokes your creative juices, and turn this into a gem of angst, rebirth and redemption. Write something everyday.

Its a very likely scenario that Ranma should one time snap from all the stress heaved upon him/her. Heck, a normal person would have snapped a long time ago.

That s/he went onto a homicidal rampage really is no surprise; nor is the outcome. After the Saffron incident nearly no one would have been able to stop Ranma. I'm quite sure all his suitors and rivals got a good glimpse upon how much Ranma had been holding back when he went berserk on them.

It's also not very surprising that Akane should turn to Ryoga; I always thought that if he'd have a real choice between Akane and Akari that he'd choose Akane in a heartbeat. Shows Akane's hypocricy quite nicely.

Nice to see that at least Nabiki held true to Ranma; what she did to give him a reason to live might be a bit unorthodox but hey, if it works who should complain? And at least Nodoka will have her heart's desire fulfilled, finally she'll have a grandchild.

All in all quite depressing and sad but the end gives a spark of hope that things will get better. Too bad that you'll leave it here for this has a lot of potential.

Trugeta.

Great story. The only thing I don't like is the fact that you say it's a one-shot :( I really hope you change your mind about that, because I can already tell that this would be another terrific fic.