I like that you wrote it in anachronic order. :)

That was so sad.

powerful

Yet again another great story :)

Oh, wow, this is just really, really, really sad. And amazingly well written. I love the focus of it, and, well, its just AMAZING. I mean, its amazingly sad, but you just manage to put the emotion into words so well. And the motions of Kakashi, a boy who is forced to grow up too fast. *shrugs* Amazing.

Oh, wow. I loved the last section. We all know how Kakashi's father died, but I've never ever pictured it. I guess vaguely I imagined it was done in an isolated area and that Kakashi only found out when the body was found and reported back. The scene you wrote is a lot more dramatic and impacting. And is it true that the mission Sakumo failed in was one that would have ended the war? I don't remember that detail being in the manga.

I like it

a nice, dramatic story! I loved it!

This is so sad...especially the last section...but I liked it anyway.

This made me cry. The mourning in this piece is palpable throughout. It is beautiful and spare - an elegy. I especially like how you play with time, first forward than back, then forward again, skipping around from one loss to another. I'm grateful I met you, and that I can read your beautiful writing.

Wow, that was... wow. I loved the whole Kakashi-Yondaime part about the Heroes' Stone. That was truly inspirational.

Nicely done. Though I didn't recognize who the woman at the start was. Rin? Excellent characterization and description. And your view of how the boss toad would treat his summoner's death was nicely done. Keep writing!

Beautiful introspective. It's hard to find well-written stories of young Kakashi and his generation, and your stories are a treat. Keep writing!

Wow...that was great.
Loved every part of it^^

oh my god this made me cry i LOVE IT!