I hope you can continue this one day, it's a great read and I would love to see more sibling interaction with John and his sister.

I really enjoyed this piece. A lot of emotion in it. Well-written. Bad enough to have one enemy to trick, but two? Especially one the caliber of Jack. The character of John is not often shown to have too much emotion, and often comes off as harsh and uncaring. However, you showed another side of him. One that is gentler, and very caring.