Cool story! You should keep writing, don't let this be the only one! Ha! Ha! You thanked Crayola -- I got that. :-)

Cool story kinda short for my taste but iy was good and i also really liked the ending it was funny keep up the good work.

After finishing the fic, my first thought was that this story was definitely ideal to read as a bedtime story to small Sailormoon fans! I think it's clever that the author, intending it as a story for her little sister, chose to present it in the style of a children's storybook: simple writing, short chapters, and a positive moral to boot. It can be very difficult to write in a style for children: choosing simple words and easy to follow plots without making the story inane or boring. This story is simple enough for kids to follow, but entertaining enough for the parent or babysitter to enjoy telling it. It keeps very well in the style of the Sailormoon dub, the only version that most little kids would have seen, making it a new stimulus for a proven kid pleaser. I can just see it as one of those big print book with illustrations. Perhaps the author might try illustrating it and presenting it to whoever the heck owns the Sailormoon rights now. Wonderful job!