Damn, that was, wow, amazing. Sad, very sad, but it was a great characterization of Leo. Loved it!

Touching, and nice perspective. It is obvious who it is ^^

It's so sad... Poor Leo! *hopes she's right* I can only imagine how he must feel. I think he was justified and did the right thing, but that sort of thing is always difficult to deal with.

~ME~

I'm trying to get caught up on all your wonderful stories, Terran. This is so well-done-- telling it from the 911 operator's POV, and piecing together the story from Leo's conflicted disclosure. Really moving. Some synchronicity for me, too. I've been wanting to explore what the effects of learning to kill, *having* to kill, will have on a young psyche. I mean, it's life-changing for adults-- military and law enforcement personnel-- so how intense might the impact be on a young kid who is already an outsider from society?
Well, I'm off on a tangent. Be back later. ;o)
Great one shot, Terran!

~GW

Hey! Wazzup? Are you going to continue this? I think it woul dmake a great chap story. Anyways, loved the way you wrtoe it. I think its great.

TCT
Ever notice that everyone going slower then you is an idiot and everyone going faster then you is a maniac?
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WOW...just...wow. This was an extremely good one shot. Gotta be Leo. Man, so well written and thought out. The emotions were perfect and I could just see what was happening play out in my head. I agree that Leo would be so shaken up after his first kill, and he did it for honor...SO AMAZING! I love that you encorporated Japanese terms into it as well. Giri means "duty" or "obligation" right? Oh man...going on my favorites. GREAT JOB!

I am now a fan of your writing. Let's see what else I can find... Did I mention this was EXCELLENT! Poor Leo...

It's Leo, isn't it? Yay! I get a pat on the back! This was a very nice story; it was serious and made you think. I would probably peg this as very close to Leo's reaction were he in this situation. Very nicely done, I liked it a lot.

Leo... you poor, poor soul... I'm sad to say this had really touched me, I never really thought Leo would be reacting like so, it really gives an eye view of the whole situation.. the fear, the panic, and most important of all, the Experiance!

sigh, poor kid...

Seems I read this and forgot to review. Anyway, this was neat. Definatly Leo. poor kid, being the first to kill. It isn't fair, though he didthe right thing. I really admire the set up-- How the girl reacted to what she was learning anout him. Nice style- nice job.

Well, I think any of them would go through this turmoil after killing someone, especially when they're so young. And I could see any of them making an annoumounous phone call to discuss it. But I think only Leo would take it this far, to think about killing himself because of the bad example he set for the others, and of course the whole "father's son" thing.

I don't know about him making a call like that from the lair though. Even if it can't be traced it still seems like he would have used a totally unconnected phone booth away from his family. But he was in shock too.

Attaboy, Leo!

An interesting character interpretation, unusual in that all she'll ever know about him is... his voice.

Good job. =)

Curiouser and curiouser (okay that really has nothin to do with the story I just like saying it). Anywayz this I liked it, quite interesting.

You could easily go more on this if you wanted, but hey it's your tale, spin it however you will.

Jarred Fouche
misterfooch

Wow, this was so good. Great intensity and emotion. You're such a great writer. Like the other reviewer(s), I wish you could make this into a longer story. It would be interesting to see him (Leo, right?) talk to Splinter and his brothers about it.

Anyway, great job. You totally grabbed my attention with this one!

TINKSY

P.S.- Please! I'm begging you! Finish your others... especially Toy Soldiers and Culture Shock. Please?...

you're not gonna leave it like that are you? That was good... at first I thought it was Raph, but wow... please write more...