A complex fic, indeed. This was interesting.

i wish angelina lived and i have a question is the baby fred's?

Hi, Troll here. Ha!

I'm going to start off this review by making a self-declaration. I promise to read the entire story or chapter before making a review. I will provide specifics such as quotes of lines and name of characters. I will be fair and honest, rewarding the good parts and bashing the bad parts. I do solemnly swear.

Let the games begin! :)

2 Reviews? What you couldn't get anyone other than close relatives to review? Ha-Ha! Okay, cheap shot - I know!

Now we start with the review.

The first part of your fic was horrible, in the sense of visual imagery.

"The stairs smelled like urine, cigarette smoke, and garbage. It was awful but bearable. Dmitri had smelled worse. The stairs was like a field full of flowers compared to the stench of rotting corpses."

Okay. Got it! It's a dump! Don't really need for you to give me that much detail. You could've written that it was a dump and I would've got the idea. Talk about going overboard.

The middle part was much better, (how could it not be?) It helps explain what Dmitri was doing there. Not that you clearly defined his character as you didn't even describe what he looked like.

The ending or closing part of the story is the best part of your fic. You write like Tom Clancy in the sense that you totally explain everything on the last chapter. Up till the end I was still confused as to why Dmitri would be seeing Arlene Johnson after everything his family did to Angelina. Even at the end I wasn’t the least bit supportive of Dmitri who by his own words was a coward and had made no personal changes to be something else. Which brings up the point of why the story? Why doesn’t this character show some personal growth and admit to his part in the torture and kidnapping of Marley, other than him trying to raise the baby to which he’s not the father. He should at least tell Fred Weasley that he has a son. I also didn't care for the way that you portrayed the Weasley family and I'm sure that Fred Weasley would not be a Ministry official. I know AU.. Yeah, yeah.

The backside problem with AU fics is that the characters are no longer themselves by definition. They might as well be characters with different names like an OC.

To sum it all up, I was hoping it would be worse than it was. However, I have to say, “not bad, but definitely not an easy or enjoyable read.”

You really got me at the end. I was really confused with him knowing the outcome but now I understand. Great job with this one

woah.
i honestly thought that marley was montague's. well, i was a tad bit confused with the part where it said: "he’d claim Marley as his own and take him to her mother as an effort to connect the child with her?" which would imply that the child didn't belong to him, but i was too absorbed to really think about it. then when it came to the part where it was talking about fred and angelina's relationship and it said something like: "he didn't know much of the relationship, only the outcome." i'd wondered, breifly, "what outcome?" but the last line really got me.
it was good -- original -- different -- but good.
~angelface04~