Reviews for Am I Really Alone?

Reviews For: Am I Really Alone?

SmileyMiley 2005-12-12 ch 1,	abuseWHO'S TELLING THE STORY? I love it, but I want to know who is telling it. Anyway, really good job. You're a good writer.
Lizzy Weasley 2005-07-23 ch 1,	abuseWonderful and so sad! sobs Lizzy
Hermione 'DB' Granger 2005-07-09 ch 1, anon.	abuseGah, it swallowed my link before. With spaces instead of dots, it's w geocities com/headmaster_cromwell, or it can be found in my profile, if you're interested, I'd still love to have you.
Jennifer 2005-07-09 ch 1, anon.	abuseIs it generally suppose to be directing that she is having spilt-personality, the way you described her feeling and soforth stated is well written, but it needs more "bam" inside. Try to add more feeling in towards it. There wasn't much of that feeling when you wrote it, it generally seemed out of place. But overall, it's an nice one. Good work and thumbs up for your future. =)
Moon Archer 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseShort, but very well written. The lines in italics, the repetition of them and their phrasing, give this one-shot a very eerie feeling. I wonder, who is it in this story? My first instinct is to say Hermione although really it could be any character.
HERMIONE 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abusewha-?
Mrs. NOrris II 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseEr...who's point of view is this in? Ginny's? Anyway the bit about the things she knew was a bit confusing, but the ending was really powerful.
myzteek 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseO sad! i like it!
Jenn 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseReally good! but wondering...who is it?! It's driving me nuts...did I miss some keyword...lol...let me know if you can :) Again, really good! lol
Hermione 'DB' Granger 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseIt's sort of like the story equivalent of a haiku. I like the style of it, and think it has potential, but would need to be longer to have more of an emotional impact. Also, by all means build the suspense by holding back who it is throughout, but that technique only works if you reveal who it is at the end, otherwise it can be very frustrating for the reader. I'd like to invite you to join my RPG at
centaur219 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseHey -- this is elfaba_pixie from eljay :) This is good -- I think you could use more powerful words to get a feeling of stronger, more realistic emotions. But that's not to say that this is no good...because it is :) You've got a really powerful set-up, and it has so much potential. I think you could use a stronger word-choice, though to bring out all it could have. And "weather" should be "whether". Very good beginning, though. Update asap, please!
Cassandra 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseNice, but who is it? Ginny? Hermione?
Lazarus Risen 2005-07-08 ch 1,	abuseThis is Jackie from LJ. This is quite good. Please continue.
Taffy 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseCan't be bothered to login... Soft whistle This. is. REALLY. good. I aime it. :) :D
Taffy 2005-07-08 ch 1, anon.	abuseCan't be bothered to login... Soft whistle This. is. REALLY. good. I aime it. :) :D

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