Reviews for Love and a Gym Battle? The Story of Trovita Isle

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shewhogoesblah 2006-12-29 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good! Ash and Misty's love-hate relationship just never gets old!
Ri2 2006-06-20 ch 2,	abuseHERO Mode! XD I think I did something like that once...sort of... Wow, the manly men are such total, total saps. And Pikachu's a ketchup addict. Oy. Wait, how do the trainers understand their Pokemon so well?
FelicitySmith 2006-03-01 ch 1,	abuseBwahahaha. A tad excited to hear from me? Okay. So basically this is overall amazing-slash- fantastic, but I have a few suggestions. .Hmm. I'm a huge fanatic when it comes to picking out the itsy bits of writing that dont click with me- I've done it to J.K Rowling, Ann Brashares, Libba Bray, not in person, of course, I'd be overly elated if I ever met them, but I critisize as if I'm being payed. Alright Raff. Here I go. - Okay. In the beginning of the story, you wrote " Bulbasaur, a dinosaur-like Pokémon with a bulb on it’s back, and Squirtle, a small, turtlr like Pokémon of the Water variety," Watch your spelling for turtle Raff. Hah, turtlr? Nice. Good description though, hes the one with the vines that shoot hour of his back - right? I like him. - Nextly - ( I love not using proper grammar, makes my day when I'm out of school. YAY. ) You wrote "-boy?” said Misty, advancing on the poor boy“Oh boy.." " In the middle, the amount of "BOY" there is erking me. Redundancy tends to catch my eye, probably because I do it alot, honestly, I wrote in part of my book... "She listened to her instinct and looked at the window taking a double take, looking like a fool, as she always did, nothing new to her to say the least" There are like one-hundred "Looks" and "Takes" in there, shame on me. Shame. Hah. - And thirdly, ( You've got no idea how much I'm loving the abuse of grammar teehee. ) When you wrote, “No, but I do kinda feel like I left my legs back there…” said Ash with a careless tone. “TOGEPRI!” It wasn't clear to me whom screamed the first "Togepri!". I assumed Ash, but when someone has already been introduced to talking in a scentence you dont need to space it. If it was Misty, then relate Misty to it. As in add on:Misty cried, fumed, responded, blah blah blah. You know. So I'd suggest you write it like “No, but I do kinda feel like I left my legs back there…” said Ash with a careless tone “TOGEPRI!” This was really great, your very descriptive, somewhat like me actually. Shocking. You use bigger words however, I go with the flow, I dont exactly have a natural wide spanned vocab. I find a word of the week, and use it.
sykilik101 2005-12-22 ch 2,	abuseXD! Oh man, that was funny! I especially liked how Tracey questioned the "awesome" power of KETCHUP! Good stuff. Read and review my fics, especially "Mist in the Moonlight" and "Christmas Waltz". Later! Writing: A Passion of the Soul
Wondering Wanderer 2005-11-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseI read your ideas in your profile. My advice is... you should first complete the story you have already. Then... well, the first idea is funny, the second is... okay, and the third... well, use that as a back-up fic, in case you get ANOTHER writer's block (I know you will, these story ideas are perfect for writer's block).
Virgo Writer 2005-11-18 ch 1,	abuseI think you have a real talent for describing stuff, I was especially impressed by how you described Ash's staring in the first paragraph. Keep up the good work, you're doing great.
SciFiKev 2005-11-02 ch 2,	abuse(Grabs tissue and blows nose) Oh my gosh! That was so... (blows nose again)... beautiful! I... I... am at a loss for words! Well, not really. Ease up on the arguments, please, can't there be some level of kindness between Ash & Misty!? Despite their endless rage, however, it was great. I'm bubbling up with anticipation! I'll be waiting for your next chapter!
SweetStories11 2005-11-02 ch 2,	abuseOMG! YAY! you updated!! how awesome is this! I'll tell you... it's TOTALLY awesome! lol this is great! it was so much worth the wait! and it's gotten me back on pokeshipping (i'm currently working on contestshipping) so thank you for that! I can't wait till you update this! I really enjoy your writing style!! Keep up the great work! ^-^ -Monika-
Chaos-Paladin 2005-10-30 ch 2,	abuselol, hero mode, such a funny idea. not a bad chapter, well worth the wait. I only saw one small error, but its a bit too small to worry about so continue. This was very entertaining with the jokes and all.
SciFiKev 2005-09-24 ch 1,	abuseWow! I like it! Normally Pokemon is ok... but not the best. But I love your fic! So, are you gonna make another chapter? You will make another one, right?C'mon, you can tell me what happens! Pleez? -SciFiKev
Chaos-Paladin 2005-08-30 ch 1,	abusewow, i'm surprised that i didnt read this sooner! A good amount of humor and romance. I'm liking this already! Please do continue. This is very well written and descriptive. oh yea, and thanks for your zealous efforts of reading my fic!
captain deoxys 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseHey you took the deoxys from my name. the storys great though.
Jexiny 2005-07-14 ch 1,	abuseGreat Story! Update soon! :-)
Sweet Temptations 2005-07-12 ch 1,	abuseHi:) That was a very good start to the remake:) I loved that! Can't wait for the next part. May AAML live on!
The Cougar 2005-07-12 ch 1,	abuseGood job. :)

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