Nice. ^_^

O... More! update soon! I like it.

Write more!!
I wanna read what happens next!

hm...this seems quite interesting...nice story, update, i do want to read more

I think you have a good plot, but should work on your spelling!

I( like it, ciontinue! ^_^

liked the story and can't wait until he next chapter :)

Grammar: Ryou not Ryu, Right not write, which not witch, passed instead of past, it's Tea Gardner not Granger (unless it's like that for a reason), hard not hared, Tristan not Tristain, knew not new, sweat not sweet, breaths not breathes, use past tenses instead of present ones when referring to Bakura's actions, sure not sheer, Duelits not dualist... wasn't trying to flame you but since people did this to me it's only fair to return the favor and pass it on. You need help with your grammar and your writing style. But in all the story sounds interesting and I'd like to keep reading upcoming chapters...

Good story! I really like it. ^^ I'm obsessed with Bakura, heheheh.

Anyways, uh, I saw a few little typos in your story. And just a few little errors in the characters. Not trying to be mean or anything, but Tea's last name is Gardner and Joey's is Wheeler with an H.

So... I was wondering if I could be your editor. ^^ It's not like I'd change your story or anything, I'd just look over it, and fix typos.

If you find no use for me, I suggest looking over it yourself. Anyways, good story! Please update! ^^