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RenesmeeCullen101
2009-11-21 . chapter 1
This is a very good story! Renesmee Cullen101
Scarletquillraven
2008-08-01 . chapter 1
Ah, that was so sweet and sad. Everyone was in character, the story was interesting. And I thought your English was excellent! Good job.
JediHobbit283
2005-10-27 . chapter 1
This was very interesting. i came across it before and i thought was very Ani-Pad story.
Excellent. A good favourite of mine of the Anakin and Padme' stories
BarkingdogBARK
2005-08-08 . chapter 1
Your story is just super! I can't believe after reading your story that English is not your first language! I absolutely enjoyed the whole fiction thoroughly! All those scenes with Anakin and Padmé are making me blush >_>
Julie
2005-08-07 . chapter 1
This was good. I'm keeping up with your forgivable sinners story.. though I must confess that I've neglected to review. Sorry bout that. I'm a tad lazy at times. Know however, that just because I'm not reviewing doesn't mean that they aren't worth the while. But I'm hear to say that I'm enjoying both stories and can't wait for the next chapters to come in F.S. Keep up the good work. When did you lean enlgish if it's not your first lanuage? You are remarkable coherent. I wrote a story in greek once (at about the 1st grade level of comphrehension) for school and it's very difficult. I commend you. ;) cheerio!

~Julie
Emily
2005-07-31 . chapter 1
Great Story!
Medb
2005-07-30 . chapter 1
Beautiful, somewhat slow-paced story... But I think the slow rhythm suits this kind of romantic fic. You descripe nicely Skywalkers' private time together. They don't have too much of it during Clone wars... Mentioning Obi-Wan's hunt of Asajj Ventress is a nice touch, although it (as well as mentioning Durge) might be a bit confusing for readers who haven't been reading comics or EU books (or watching Clone wars cartoon series). But it is always nice when writer has done his/hers research and know more than just the basic stuff. Those little details makes stories all more realistic =)

Obi-Wan's words at the end of the story made me think if he really knew about Anakin and Padmé all along... It would have been nice to hear a bit of his private thoughts on the subject also. (But then again, this was Padmé/Ani -centered story. Obi-Wan's musing belong to another story =D) Ani and Padmé are such a cute couple. It makes me sad to know they will end up apart... =/

Nitpicking: At the beginning you mention "Nubian nights", when they are in Naboo. Nubian refers to the planet Nubia, not Naboo. In episode I they use adjective 'Nubian' to refer to Queen Amidala's ship. The ship (or its hyperdrive)is made in planet Nubia, as Naboo isn't much of a industrial starship-building planet...
Actually, it is quite common mistake that people use "Nubian" when referring Naboo. They sound similar after all. =D
Clover64
2005-07-30 . chapter 1
Excellent story! You capture both characters beautifully! Wonderful writing...
solo23
2005-07-15 . chapter 1
I like the story a lot!! i really like your other sw story, 2. anyway, you mentioned ventress a lot, and i've heard of her before, and i know she's the one who gave anakin the scar, but is she mentioned in any of the books?? i would really like to know the title of the book if it talks about her. thanx. and i truly enjoy your stories. you're a wonderful author.
meandmysharpie
2005-07-14 . chapter 1
yes, that was good! i had wanted to know when those two had had time to do this, when he was in the outer rim for five months... so, it's fun to imagine what happened.
Coral Candy
2005-07-14 . chapter 1
A beautiful story, I am going to pretend that he never turned into an evil yellow eyed monster and insted they lived happily ever after. Great story!
Warrior of Virtue
2005-07-11 . chapter 1
Excellent. Very enjoyable.
CyberwriterX
2005-07-11 . chapter 1
Good, but could've given more details about the sex... XP

2005-07-11 . chapter 1
you have done a fabulous job with this story
eridani
2005-07-10 . chapter 1
Very sweet. Considering English is your second language, your grammar isn't bad. You could use a beta reader perhaps to polish it off for you, but I wouldn't worry too much about it.
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