charlie, you're such a loser & hardly funny. FAIL ~_~"

yay! loved it!

Oh My God!! OMG!! That was so CREATIVE!! Seriously!...

I'm sure i commented you in ur other story. Well this person. I'm her cousin Xavi. Your grammar is ridiculous. Anyways my cousin came back so...here she is.

=d I thought i'd keep my couzys comment on here. He's a jerk so ignore him cuse i gots bad grammar too. Anyways so far so good. i haven't read the whole story but its good. I looked at ur reviews. u get so many complaints on bad grammar yet so many fans. Lolz mix of yin and yang...i think...forgot wat that was. Anyways keepa writing ~Res and Crazy evil funky looking Cousin Xavi

*Dripping with sarcasm* You have the BEST grammar ever!
-work on it, it sounds like a recount. Not gona bother reading anymore, soz

Well, it sucks on ice.

You have a very small vocabulary, from what I can tell, and you have the story going faster than it should. Describe what the rooms look like, what clothes people are wearing, and DON'T FORGET YOU D's! Theres a LOT od sentences where you say somthing like:

InuYasha smile and reach for the cup.

That soulnd like someone telling him what to do. It should be:

InuYasha smiled as he reached for the cup.

See the difference? Also, stop acting like your telling a story, and make it sound like a book. It sounds like a 7 year-old is telling us a story. DETAIL and VOCABULARY.

aw... it was so sad at the end. but then they got married. its so sweet! i would luv to read more of ur stories!

Your grammar is disgraceful.
You have used language inappropriate for k . ex- f*, kinky, etc.
It made me laugh so I liked it.

hello :) I rlly enjoyed your story but evven so, there were some parts that really bugged me. Not to sound like a jerk but please read over your story and make sure you use the right words. But other than that I thought it was reat. good song choices to ♥ I really liked the ones you made up. well hope to read another story of yours soon

♥KiKi-Kitty♥ ☺☻♥♦♣♠•◘○

Omg tha sing is beautiful!
can a use the lyrics and try
to sing it?

does kagome have to act like a **? although inuyasha is a play boy i cant help feeling sorry for him.

wow this was such a awesome story!
im so glad that evrything turned out perfecto in the end

If you wanted to torture Inuyasha the way I do (Similar to yours, but more evil) do you know what I would do?

I would put sleeping pills in his drink and then while he's out, put syrup and add feathers, a beak, and paint his head red and hair gell it spiky, glue those hard but bendy metal thingys covered with something to his feet and make it look like chicken feet, put eggs on his side, paint his butt red, put worms in his mouth, and tie him to his bed along with real live sleeping chickens on him so when he wakes up it starts attacking him. (You don't wanna know how I know sleeping chickens attack when awaken...) P.S. make sure the glue is gorilla glue. That thing sticks good... (Again don't tell me how I know it) and the feathers and glue are in his underwear, pants, shirt, and used to keep the feathers on Inu. -smiles innocently-

Yeah, it's the chicken concept lol. No worries, I've done some of it before. I used gorilla glue once for my pranks... But that was when I did it on my cuz's bro's date. I was bored and I had only gorilla glue in my bag for in-case needed pranks cause I always find something to substitute whatever I need but since I was in a car with ** hidden under the seats, I rolled down the window when they were making out on the side of the car without either noticing, took both of my cuz' bro date and his shirt/spaghetti strap and glued it together with a HUGE GLOB and then rolled the window up on the window and put even more glue and when i was done and since the window wouldnt close all the way i was getting grossed out from all of it, took a ** magazine and glued it to the window's (all of them) and then to get their attention i put glue down her back, she squealed, there was a hole where you could see me and she saw me making gross faces at the ** magazine i pretended reading, she slapped him, kneed him THERE, and tried leaving him but the two were stuck so in the end I was told to get them away from the other but i made a deal of 50$, a free DS game for my DS, and any anime poster I wanted in the trunk of the car (tons of them of Inuyasha too!). I found some kind of pliers in the back so i cut the stuff and she ended up having to hold it, him getting a good view and him ending up with a aching groin and me getting my stuff and blah blah blah.

See? And that was all in less than... half an hour? I swear those two make out too long. O MY im blabbering too much again. I cant help but be evil but i cant help but help either! and by help i mean helping myself. (I feel so good today I think I might either overdose something with medicine and play a prank, be lazy, torture myself with exercise, or listen to music while reading more fanficstories (ffs)... I think I'll stick with the last one :D)

JA NEE!! (random review, I know, but I'm too happy to even care! P.S. NEW RECORD! LONGEST REVIEW EVA! WO!

-smiling innocently with an angel halo and puppy face, white gown, white slippers, angel wings, harp, no make-up (Pure beauty! lol no. pure cuteness! xD I'm not hot, but im too cute :D -people pinch me and im 11 for gods sake!-) but underneath the dress is the satans tail. (I'm... SATANS DAUGHTER! -insert and evil laugh here-)

JA NE! KuroInuTaiYoukai (DarkDogDemonLord err.. mistress lol as of today, someone added Tai- because of me being evil... I think it's cause on the person's lunch I added a bit of something muwahahah!)

Lil sis chibi msg: Random I know but she's too happy now... Sorry if its so long but dont blame me... she likes blabbering about her evilness... -cower and hear an evil laugh-

OM MY ** GOD I LOVE YOUR STORY I'M SO ADDIN TO FAV'S

that was the funniest story i read in awhile. good job keep writing. kikiyo bashing was awesome.