i like it. great plot. great diction. loved the way you wrote it. loved the way you drove it home too. lol.

the ending is amusing. very.

haven't lost your touch at all.ü

So deep! It makes you feel exactly what the characters do...

nice one

this is a nice look at how hard hakkai would find adjusting to being who he is and to try to keep the self loathing at bay. The title is a nice touch as yes you do get the underlying feeling that he does feel indebted to both sanzo and gojyo!

kudos to you-

zan