*sniffs* That was so...beautiful *starts bawling again* *sniffels* That story was amazingly well written, and so sad. I really liked it, even though it made me cry. You're a very good writer, the imagery and feeling really came out well. Good work!

This story is very sad. I even cried through half of it.

I think this is a good story. Maybe u chould divide it into chapters so it is easier to read. It is very long. You intend to make it parts 1, 2, 3 but i think it is better to divide it by chaps.

I like the exotic and suspending way u depict Koutoku and Shun. They are really different in this plot. A new perspective.